Englische Bewerbung für ein Praktikum in China

[BlondChinese]

Hallo Community,

Ich bräuchte dringend eure Hilfe, ich verstehe zwar fast alles auf Englisch aber wenn es dann an das eigene schreiben kommt bin ich mir doch sehr unsicher.
Wäre super wenn Ihr mal drüber schauen könntet und mir ein zwei tipps gebt.
Habe mir schon ein paar Korrekturen von euch angeschaut und fand die bisher immer super. (joy, duckduck etc



Dear Mr. (complete name and title):
In my current position as an apprentice in Technical Engineering at*****, I come in contact with many Company’s specialized in producing design oriented Faucets.
Trough your Website I was able to gather information about your ambitious design and construction projects.I am very interested in an internship with ***** and believe that my education and employment background could make a valuable contribution to your company's interests.
I would like to improve my knowledge and experience in international Engineering through an internship at your company and simultaneously get an insight into your company, the Chinese people and Chinese culture.
This internship would also help me to improve my English and my basic Hanyu skills.In addition to my practical experience in Technical Engineering, I acquired a secondary school diploma called Abitur with focus on machine construction. In my future studies I intend to focus on Business and Engineering.
I would like to work in your company for 6 months from Janu CC to Aug CC, 2013.
In the meantime I intend toparticipate in a language study program to be better prepared for a period of residence in Shanghai.
Attached is a copy of my resume, with more details about my qualifications for the position.

!!!(Within the next week I will contact you to confirm that you received my e-mail and resume and to answer any questions you may have.)!!!

Thank you very kindly for your consideration.
Sincerely,

[Delfino]

Hallo Community,

Ich bräuchte dringend eure Hilfe, ich verstehe zwar fast alles auf Englisch,
aber wenn es dann an das eigene Schreiben geht bin ich mir doch sehr unsicher.
Es wäre super wenn Ihr einmal korrekturlesen könntet und mir ein zwei Tipps geben könntet.
Ich habe mir schon ein paar Korrekturen von euch angeschaut und fand sie bisher immer super.
(joy, Duckduck etc. )


Dear Mr. [complete name and title],Trough your website I became aware of your ambitious design and construction projects.I am very interested in an internship with *** and believe that I could be a valuable addition
to your teamdue to my education and experience.In my current position as an apprentice in Technical Engineering at***
I am in contact with many companies which specialise in the production of design-oriented faucets.
Prior to myapprenticeship, which provides me withpractical experience in technical engineering,
I was awarded a secondary school diploma called Abitur with focus on machine construction.I would like to deepen my knowledgein engineeringandgain experienceinternationally through
an internship at your company. I am also interested in learning about your company, the Chinese people
and Chinese culture. Hopefully, this internship would also allow me to utilise my English skills and
improve my basic Hanyu skills.In the future I intend to focus my studies on the business aspects
of engineering.

I would really like to work in your company for 6 months between January and August, 2013.
In the meantime I intend toparticipate in a language study program to prepare myself for a period
of residence in Shanghai.

Please find attached a copy of my resume with more details about my qualifications for the position.

(Within the next week I will contact you (how???) to confirm that you received this e-mail and resume.
I would also answer any questions you may have.)
I'd strongly advise against this paragraph. May I suggest that you provide a wide range of communication details
(at least e-mail, Skype name / aquivalent Chinese software ID and a mobile phone number including German country code)
to allow them to contact you when and how they'd like to get in touch.

I am looking forward to hearing from you. oder Thank you very kindly for your consideration.

Sincerely,

[your name]

making a contribution to your company = donating something to their company (e.g. money)
Vorsicht: interests kann u.a. auch Zinsen bedeuten

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Nur ein paar Kleinigkeiten.

Hallo Community,

Ich bräuchte dringend eure Hilfe, ich verstehe zwar fast alles auf Englisch,
aber wenn es dann an das eigene Schreiben geht bin ich mir doch sehr unsicher.
Es wäre super wenn Ihr einmal korrekturlesen könntet und mir ein zwei Tipps geben könntet.
Ich habe mir schon ein paar Korrekturen von euch angeschaut und fand sie bisher immer super.
(joy, Duckduck etc. )


Dear Mr. [complete name and title],Through your website I became aware of your ambitious design and construction projects.I am very interested in an internship with *** and believe that I could be a valuable addition
to your teamdue to my education and experience.In my current position as an apprentice in Technical Engineering at*** ,
I am in contact with many companies which specialise in the production of design-oriented faucets.
Prior to myapprenticeship, which provided me withpractical experience in technical engineering,
I was awarded a secondary school diploma called Abitur with focus on machine construction.I would like to deepen my knowledgein engineeringandgain experienceinternationally through
an internship in your company. I am also interested in learning about your company, the Chinese people
and Chinese culture. Hopefully, this internship would also allow me to utilise my English skills and
improve my basic Hanyu skills.In the future I intend to focus my studies on the business aspects
of engineering.

I would really like to work in your company for 6 months between January and August, 2013.
In the meantime I intend toparticipate in a language study program to prepare myself for a period
of residence in Shanghai.

Please find attached a copy of my resume with more details about my qualifications for the position.

(Within the next week I will contact you (how???) to confirm that you received this e-mail and resume.
I will also answer any questions you may may have.)
I'd strongly advise against this paragraph. May I suggest that you provide a wide range of communication details
(at least e-mail, Skype name / aquivalent Chinese software ID and a mobile phone number including German country code)
to allow them to contact you when and how they'd like to get in touch.

I am looking forward to hearing from you. oder Thank you very kindly for your consideration.

Sincerely,

[your name]

making a contribution to your company = donating something to their company (e.g. money)
Vorsicht: interests kann u.a. auch Zinsen bedeuten