Fahrenheit 9/11 Korrektur

[SUMM9R]

Guten Tag liebes Forum,

Ich habe gerade eine Inhaltsangabe geschrieben zu dem Film Fahrenheit 9/11 von Michael Moore. Der Text ist etwas länger und daher weiß ich nicht, ob es hier angebracht ist um einen Korrektur zu bitten


Gruß

[George]

Hi SUMM9R,
längere Texte sind lt. unserer Forenregeln nicht erlaubt.

Es würde sich aber anbieten, einen Teil deiner Inhaltsangabe zu posten. So kannst du dann sehen, ob und welche Fehler du machst und den Rest dann selber anpassen.

CU
George
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[SUMM9R]

Okay, das werde ich machen

Gruß

[SUMM9R]

Hier ist ein kleiner Ausschnitt aus meiner Abhandlung, vielen Dank Gruß

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Moore accuses the government that their motivation of the Iraq war is to increase the profit of the United States and not to destroy weapons of mass destruction. He creates the impression that the whole war serves an economic purpose.



Critics about Fahrenheit 9/11

·All facts in this documentation are based on the truth, but they don’t contain any proof for his theories.
·He plays with a lot of facts, figures and relationships to create a negative impression about George W. Bush and the whole Government.
·Moore leaves out some important information. He shows the financial cooperation with the Bin Laden family but he didn’t mentioned that Osama Bin Laden was disowned by his family many years ago and not equipped with a billion dollar inheritance. And the Bin-Laden-Group is one of the most important cooperation in the Arabian world.
·The documentary is pretty emotional and subjective. There is just one point of view.


My own opinion

Moore uses provocative questions, ironical comments and enormous skips. He combined facts which don’t belong together and suggests contexts which don’t exist. All th is is part of his provocation, he wants to shock people, make them thinking. In my opinion there are some interesting facts about 9/11 and the whole chapter about George W, but there are some facts we don’t know. Nothing in the world is just black or white.

[SUMM9R]

Kann mir bitte jemand helfen, in diesem Teil der Abhandlung bin ich mir extrem unsicher, dass alles in Ordnung ist.

Gruß

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Patience young Padawan...  ;) .. there you go:

Hier ist ein kleiner Ausschnitt aus meiner Abhandlung, vielen Dank Gruß

...

Moore accuses the government that their motivation of the Iraq war is to increase the profit of the United States and not to destroy weapons of mass destruction. He creates the impression that the whole war serves an economic purpose.



Critics about Fahrenheit 9/11

·All facts in this documentation are based on the truth, but they don’t contain any proof for his theories.
·He plays with a lot of facts, figures and relationships to create a negative impression about George W. Bush and the whole Government.
·Moore leaves out some important information. He shows the financial cooperation with the Bin Laden family but he didn’t mentioned that Osama Bin Laden was disowned by his family many years ago and not equipped with a billion dollar inheritance. And the Bin-Laden-Group is one of the most important cooperations in the Arabian world.
·The documentary is pretty emotional and subjective. There is just one point of view.


My own opinion

Moore uses provocative questions, ironical comments and enormous skips. He combines facts which don’t belong together and suggests contexts which don’t exist. All this is part of his provocation, he wants to shock people, make them think. In my opinion there are some interesting facts about 9/11 and the whole chapter about George W, but there are some facts we don’t know. Nothing in the world is just black or white.