Könnten Sie bitte die Grammatik meiner Bewerbung korrigieren?
I am a student of the fourth semester in Business Administration my focus is on Information Management and Operations Management. I would like to apply for the Operations Management position. The advertisement I found on your website.
You will see that I have accumulated an appreciable amount of experience through the university, my internships and jobs. Aided by my time at the university, I improved the basics in Operations Management, Information Management, Controlling and Marketing. Through my previous activities I learned a lot about the meaning of responsibility. Therefore, I am ready to apply the principles of hard work and assertiveness to begin a productive and challenging career as a Operative Manager with your organization.
As you can behold from my attaches resume I have already gained some know - how with abetted me to operate in a group and to communicate with people. Furthermore, my familiarity with acting under pressure and handling of dissatisfied people increased thanks to my employment at McDonald's. Besides my work experience I also mastered some additional courses, which helped me to handle Arena and SAP, this circumstance allows me to think than a can be a helpful member for your company. Finally one of my biggest passions is the motor-sport so that I can completely identify with your concern and this allows a high degree of motivation and loyalty.
I am extremely interested and feel that my degree in communication and my organizational abilities make me to a strong candidate.
I look forward to collect a lot of experiences for my further life, which are eminent important as my internship demonstrated to me.
Thank for your time and consideration. Should you have any questions before that time, feel free to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Bitte um Korrektur meiner englischen Bewerbung
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Re: Bitte um Korrektur meiner englischen Bewerbung
I am a student in my fourth semester graduating in Business Administration with focus on Management of Information and Operations. The advert on your website drew my attention; therefore I would like to apply for the Operations Management position.
You will see that I have accumulated an appreciable amount of experience during my time at university, during my internships and various other jobs.
While gaining support and acquiring information at university, I was able to contribute towards an improvement of the basics that concern Operations Management, Controlling and Marketing.
Aided by my time at the university, I improved the basics in Operations Management, Information Management, Controlling and Marketing. Through my previous activities I learned a lot about the meaning of responsibility. Therefore, I am ready to apply the principles of hard work and assertiveness to start
a productive and challenging career as
an
Operative Manager with your
company. I would like to draw your attention to my attachments and my résumé, which show proof of the knowledge I have collected and the ability of managing people and the experience of dealing with operations and the right way of communication. Furthermore, I reinforced my ability acting under pressure and the handling of complaints thanks to my employment at McDonalds.
As you can conclude from viewing my attachments and my résumé I have already gained some knowledge abetting me to operate in a group and to communicate with people. Furthermore, my familiarity with acting under pressure and handling of unsatisfied people increased thanks to my employment at McDonald's.
Apart from my work experience I also mastered some additional courses, which helped me to operate Arena and SAP.
This circumstance allows me to think than
I
could
be a useful employee working in
your company.
Last but not least, one of my biggest passions is the motor-sport
that is why
I can completely identify
myself with your concern, giving me
a high degree of motivation and loyalty.
I am extremely interested
about this employment
and I feel that my degree of communication and my skills of organisation make me a strong candidate.I am looking forward to
collecting a lot of experiences for my further life, which are
eminently
important as my internships demonstrated to me.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Should you have any queries in the meantime, do not hesitate to contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Hi! I have made some adjustments to your application, but I am not absolutely sure if it is all correct. Maybe it could be of some help to change a few sentences and let it be proof-read by someone else.
You will see that I have accumulated an appreciable amount of experience during my time at university, during my internships and various other jobs.
While gaining support and acquiring information at university, I was able to contribute towards an improvement of the basics that concern Operations Management, Controlling and Marketing.
Aided by my time at the university, I improved the basics in Operations Management, Information Management, Controlling and Marketing. Through my previous activities I learned a lot about the meaning of responsibility. Therefore, I am ready to apply the principles of hard work and assertiveness to start
a productive and challenging career as
an
Operative Manager with your
company. I would like to draw your attention to my attachments and my résumé, which show proof of the knowledge I have collected and the ability of managing people and the experience of dealing with operations and the right way of communication. Furthermore, I reinforced my ability acting under pressure and the handling of complaints thanks to my employment at McDonalds.
As you can conclude from viewing my attachments and my résumé I have already gained some knowledge abetting me to operate in a group and to communicate with people. Furthermore, my familiarity with acting under pressure and handling of unsatisfied people increased thanks to my employment at McDonald's.
Apart from my work experience I also mastered some additional courses, which helped me to operate Arena and SAP.
This circumstance allows me to think than
I
could
be a useful employee working in
your company.
Last but not least, one of my biggest passions is the motor-sport
that is why
I can completely identify
myself with your concern, giving me
a high degree of motivation and loyalty.
I am extremely interested
about this employment
and I feel that my degree of communication and my skills of organisation make me a strong candidate.I am looking forward to
collecting a lot of experiences for my further life, which are
eminently
important as my internships demonstrated to me.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Should you have any queries in the meantime, do not hesitate to contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Hi! I have made some adjustments to your application, but I am not absolutely sure if it is all correct. Maybe it could be of some help to change a few sentences and let it be proof-read by someone else.