The"Walk of Fame" since 1958. This is a sidewalk which extend (means erstecken) up to 18 blocks on both sides of Hollywood Boulevard, in the Chow Street from the east to the west of La Brea Avenue.At the moment there are 2.457 stars. If you are prominent and in America an important role of the entertainment industry plays you get maybe also one. There are five categories in which the stars are split: film, television, music, radio and theater *. The stars are from dusky pink-colored Terrazzo, the names are let and the category symbol is from brass (means Messing). Joanne Woodward has got the first star. But there is till this day only one person in all 5 categories a star has agreed this person is called genes Autry. And there are 3 stars in no category are taken-> The 1st Tom Bradley to the long-standing mayor by LA. 2. The 50th jubilee of Disneyland. The last star hears 7 policemen who died in their work as policeman’s. In the first 16 years were 1,600 stars awarded. Since that time, every year are come about 24 new stars. Since 1978 the Walk of Fame was recognised to an cultural monument. And here more examples from stars:
Neil Armstrong, Sandra Bullock, Johnny Depp, Shakira, Lassie and also Mickey Mouse.
*There are 5 categories in those the stars are split: Film, television, music, radio and theater.( wäre dieser Satz besser)
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Hi Dafne,
I proofread and edited your paragraph. The corrected parts are in blue.
Anything that needed to be explained (but should be taken out by you when you print it) is in red.
The "Walk of Fame" has existed since 1958. This sidewalk runs nearly (or ‘…runs almost…’) eighteen blocks along both sides of Hollywood Boulevard, extending eastward to Chow Street and westward to La Brea Avenue. At the moment there are 2,457 stars. If you have a prominent and important role in the American entertainment industry, you too might get one some day. (I rewrote this sentence for clarity.) The stars are split into five categories: film, television, music, radio and theater. The stars are made from dusky pink-colored Terrazzo, and the names and category symbols are cast from brass. (you could also write “…are made of brass.” or just “…are cast brass.”) Joanne Woodward received the first star. But to this day, only one person, Gene (kein ‘s’) Autry, has received a star in all five categories. And there are three stars with no categories: (1) Tom Bradley, the long-standing mayor of L.A, (2) the 50th anniversary of Disneyland, and (3) the last star honors seven policemen who died in the line of duty. (this is what we say when a policeman, firefighter, soldier, etc. dies or is injured while doing their work) In the first sixteen years of the Walk of Fame, 1,600 stars were awarded. Since then, about 24 new stars are awarded each year. The Walk of Fame was recognized as a cultural monument in 1978. More examples of stars include Neil Armstrong, Sandra Bullock, Johnny Depp, Shakira, Lassie and also Mickey Mouse.
A few quick notes:
English and German have the comma (,) and period (.) reversed in usage when dealing with numbers. Thus, in English, you write one million euros and zero cents like this: 1,000,000.00€
In proper written English, simple numbers like two, five, seventeen, twenty, eighty, a hundred, a million, etc. are usually spelled out as words.
Complicated numbers like 0.3, 0.99, 3.14, 7.9, 335, 2012, 5,234, 10,993.87, are always printed as numbers.
And numbers like 84, 37, 300, 2000 can be either printed as numbers or written out, like eighty-four, twenty-seven, three hundred or two thousand (its your choice, depending on how formal and proper you want to be).
If you have a large but approximate (not exact) number, you usually write a combination of the number and spelled out. So you would say "There are 84 million people in Germany," or "Last year, Shakira sold $6 million worth of concert tickets on her tour"
Years are always written as numbers (the year 2000 or 59 B.C., not the year two thousand or fifty-nine B.C.).
If you are describing something like an address, you would most likely say “The restaurant is number 14 on Maple Street between Broadway and Stevenson” or “His address is 11 Baker Avenue, Apartment #3, Orlando, Florida 20114.”
While we do have the terms “silver jubilee” (25th anniversary), “golden jubilee” (50th anniversary), and “diamond jubilee” (75th anniversary), these terms are very, very rarely ever used in modern American English. The British do still use them (like when Queen Elisabeth II celebrated her 50th year on the throne), but as they watch more and more American movies and television, they too are starting to use the term ‘jubilee’ less often. Generally you can just use the word “anniversary” in all cases.
And lastly, since you are writing about something in America, I assumed you are most interested in writing American English. I therefore used American spelling for the word 'honor' and left your word 'colored' unchanged. British English would spell it them as 'honour' and 'colour.'
Also, you spelled 'theater' the American way (which is ok); though the British form is 'theatre.' If you are doing this for a class, then you should know whether your instructor wants you to use British English -- if so, use the British forms! Overall, the most important thing is to stay consistent. Americans and Brits are fairly comfortable reading each others' English, so either form is fine. What you should not do is use both British and American spelling in the same article, essay or story; this will only annoy everyone reading it.
Good luck!
I proofread and edited your paragraph. The corrected parts are in blue.
Anything that needed to be explained (but should be taken out by you when you print it) is in red.
The "Walk of Fame" has existed since 1958. This sidewalk runs nearly (or ‘…runs almost…’) eighteen blocks along both sides of Hollywood Boulevard, extending eastward to Chow Street and westward to La Brea Avenue. At the moment there are 2,457 stars. If you have a prominent and important role in the American entertainment industry, you too might get one some day. (I rewrote this sentence for clarity.) The stars are split into five categories: film, television, music, radio and theater. The stars are made from dusky pink-colored Terrazzo, and the names and category symbols are cast from brass. (you could also write “…are made of brass.” or just “…are cast brass.”) Joanne Woodward received the first star. But to this day, only one person, Gene (kein ‘s’) Autry, has received a star in all five categories. And there are three stars with no categories: (1) Tom Bradley, the long-standing mayor of L.A, (2) the 50th anniversary of Disneyland, and (3) the last star honors seven policemen who died in the line of duty. (this is what we say when a policeman, firefighter, soldier, etc. dies or is injured while doing their work) In the first sixteen years of the Walk of Fame, 1,600 stars were awarded. Since then, about 24 new stars are awarded each year. The Walk of Fame was recognized as a cultural monument in 1978. More examples of stars include Neil Armstrong, Sandra Bullock, Johnny Depp, Shakira, Lassie and also Mickey Mouse.
A few quick notes:
English and German have the comma (,) and period (.) reversed in usage when dealing with numbers. Thus, in English, you write one million euros and zero cents like this: 1,000,000.00€
In proper written English, simple numbers like two, five, seventeen, twenty, eighty, a hundred, a million, etc. are usually spelled out as words.
Complicated numbers like 0.3, 0.99, 3.14, 7.9, 335, 2012, 5,234, 10,993.87, are always printed as numbers.
And numbers like 84, 37, 300, 2000 can be either printed as numbers or written out, like eighty-four, twenty-seven, three hundred or two thousand (its your choice, depending on how formal and proper you want to be).
If you have a large but approximate (not exact) number, you usually write a combination of the number and spelled out. So you would say "There are 84 million people in Germany," or "Last year, Shakira sold $6 million worth of concert tickets on her tour"
Years are always written as numbers (the year 2000 or 59 B.C., not the year two thousand or fifty-nine B.C.).
If you are describing something like an address, you would most likely say “The restaurant is number 14 on Maple Street between Broadway and Stevenson” or “His address is 11 Baker Avenue, Apartment #3, Orlando, Florida 20114.”
While we do have the terms “silver jubilee” (25th anniversary), “golden jubilee” (50th anniversary), and “diamond jubilee” (75th anniversary), these terms are very, very rarely ever used in modern American English. The British do still use them (like when Queen Elisabeth II celebrated her 50th year on the throne), but as they watch more and more American movies and television, they too are starting to use the term ‘jubilee’ less often. Generally you can just use the word “anniversary” in all cases.
And lastly, since you are writing about something in America, I assumed you are most interested in writing American English. I therefore used American spelling for the word 'honor' and left your word 'colored' unchanged. British English would spell it them as 'honour' and 'colour.'
Also, you spelled 'theater' the American way (which is ok); though the British form is 'theatre.' If you are doing this for a class, then you should know whether your instructor wants you to use British English -- if so, use the British forms! Overall, the most important thing is to stay consistent. Americans and Brits are fairly comfortable reading each others' English, so either form is fine. What you should not do is use both British and American spelling in the same article, essay or story; this will only annoy everyone reading it.
Good luck!