Über eine Korrektur würde ich mich sehr freuen!!!

[Kaiyako]

Hallo,

Könnte mir bitte jemand diesen

kurzen Text hier verbessern, ich möchte ein bisschen freies Schreiben üben!
Ich frage mich vor allem ob die vielen would’s hier angebracht sind.

Vielen Dank im Voraus,
Kaiyako

I’m Kaiyako, I live in the 21th century. I go to school everyday an I spent my free time with my friends or my family. An other thing I often do is playing the guitar and going to dancing lessons. Sometimes I go to church and this year I will get the confirmation.
I often use the internet and so I am in contact with many friends all over Germany.

If I lived in the -----th century in New England, I would be a Native American or a englisch colonist.
As a Native American I would not go to school but I would do a lot with my mother and cook over the fire. My brother would often go hunting in the forest.
I would live in little regulars and my family would be very fair to the nature.
My father and my brother would just kill as many animals as we would really need for survive. We would not just eat the animals. We would also use the skin for the tents (in which we live) and the bones for weapons and cutlery.
Of course I would also play with my friends and I would take part in many ceremonies for the gods I belive in.
My life would be harder than it is now but it would be peaceful. I also would take part in many ceremonies for the gods you believe in.

If I would live some years later in New England, I could also be a colonist from England. My family would have good wapons and we would live there were the Native Americans lived before.
My family and all the other colonists would feel superior to Native Americans which we would just call Indians.
We would grow animals and we would read the Bible and pray to God.
Life would be more akin to today than life as Native American. But a big differenz would still be, that today I can have contacts over the hole world owing to the Internet.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

I’m Kaiyako, I live in the 21th century. I go to school every day an I spend my free time with my friends or my family. Another thing I often do is playing the guitar and going to dancing lessons. Sometimes I go to church and this year I will get the confirmation.
I often use the internet and so I am in contact with many friends all over Germany.

If I lived in the -----th century in New England, I would be a Native American or an English colonist.
As a Native American I would not go to school but I would do a lot with my mother and cook over the fire. My brother would often go hunting in the forest.
I would live in little regulars and my family would be very fair to the nature.
My father and my brother would just kill as many animals as we would really need to survive. We would not just eat the animals. We would also use the skin for the tents (in which we live) and the bones for weapons and cutlery.
Of course I would also play with my friends and I would take part in many ceremonies for the gods I believe in.
My life would be harder than it is now but it would be peaceful. I also would take part in many ceremonies for the gods you believe in.

If I lived some years later in New England, I could also be a colonist from England. My family would have good weapons and we would live there where the Native Americans lived before.
My family and all the other colonists would feel superior to Native Americans which we would just call Indians.
We would grow animals and we would read the Bible and pray to God.

Life would be more akin to today than life as Native American. But a big difference would still be, that today I can have contacts over the whole world thanks to the Internet.

Nice text, well done!

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Kurz noch ein paar Oopserchen! Grüße an Beide!!!

I’m Kaiyako, I live in the 21st century. I go to school every day and I spend my free time with my friends or my family. Some other things I often do are playing the guitar and going to dancing lessons. Sometimes I go to church and this year I will be confirmed.
I often use the internet and so I am in contact with many friends all over Germany.

If I lived in the -----th century in New England, I would be a Native American or an English colonist.
As a Native American I would not go to school but (I) would do a lot with my mother and cook over the fire. My brother would often go hunting in the forest.
I would be part of one of the little tribes and my family would be very fair to the nature.
My father and my brother would just kill as many animals as we would really need to survive. We would not just eat the animals. We would also use the skin for the tents (in which we live) and the bones for weapons and cutlery.
Of course I would also play with my friends and I would take part in many ceremonies for the gods I believe in.
My life would be harder than it is now but it would be peaceful. I also would take part in many ceremonies for the gods you believe in. Why would you do that?

If I lived some years later in New England, I could also be a colonist from England. My family would have good weapons and we would live there where the Native Americans used to live before.
My family and all the other colonists would feel superior to Native Americans who(m) we would just call Indians.
We would breed animals and we would read the Bible and pray to God.

Life would be more akin to today than life as a Native American. But a big difference would still be that today I can stay in contact with people all over the world thanks to the Internet.

Nice text, well done!

Duckduck

Die vielen "would"s erklären sich daraus, dass Du im Konditional schreibst. Du stellst Dir also die Möglichkeit vor, Du "würdest" jetzt in Nordamerika leben. Hierfür verwendest Du den 2. Typ der if-Sätze (wenn ich ... täte, dann würde ich ...). Also alles klar soweit!

[Kaiyako]

Hallo ihr Beiden!

Vielen, vielen Dank eure Mühe und die so wahnsinnig schnelle Korrektur!:freu:

Viele liebe Grüße,
Kaiyako