Kurzer Essay. bitte um Korrektur! :)

[DiamantenFee.]

Bin sehr unsicher in der Grammatik & im Stil.
Würde mich sehr freuen über eure Verbesserungen!!


The atmosphere at the Buchanan's house.

In the first chapter Nick sees the house of the Buchanan's for the first time. Afterwards he thinks about the feelings he had and the atmosphere and tries to describe them in his diary.

The house of my cousin and her husband is big and impressive, coloured in a strong red and in a shining white (p.14, l 5-6). Their mansion is overlooking the bay and the ground is a great mix between beach and lawn (p.14, l 7-9). This house beam the peace of the afternoon down and it is inviting you to take a nap under its roof or just to sit down and enjoy the few. All in all it is a beautiful house, an adorable but expensive house.

When we went inside where was a big room with just one “enormous couch”(p.16, l 21-22). The ceiling is decorated with stucco (p.16, l  17-18). Everything felt like I was entering the room of very important people. Nevertheless everything had something unreal and I was feeling like I've come to a magic place full of calmness and trueness. Though Daisy brought with her mood a little bit disorder to it and Tom seemed to be like something bad in a place full of elegance.

In spite of everything the home of the Buchanan's is nice and an embodiment for rich, lazy, careless people.

[DiamantenFee.]

Schade, dass sich keiner Zeit dafür genommen hat! Jetzt ist es leider "zu spät",
werde es morgen meiner Lehrerin zur Korrektur geben. Naja, beim nächsten mal eben.