Ein paar Sätze zum Korrigieren...Bitte!!!

[tullius]

Hi
Bei den folgenden Sätzen bin ich mir nicht so ganz sicher ob sie grammatikalisch und stilistisch richtig sind. Könnte mir bitte jemand helfen?
thx tullius


In cities where is a high contrast between the rich and the poor are many crimes committed.
Some people cannot go out in broad daylight without the fear to get murdered.
This is the only kind of family they have got.
She reminds me of a person who needs somebody who has enough influence on her to get her to stop shoplifting.
Peter was frightened about what would happen next.
They seem to let them do whatever it is.
I cannot understand his parents that they would be shocked if he had contact to her, only because she belongs to another social class. On the other hand they did not care if Ellen who had robbed many people was with him.
They ran away because they were sure that they will be blamed for the murder.
This is the only fact that cheered me up.
I think he helped the old lady because he felt that he can do something what is right and so he lost his whole fear.
Mandy noticed that Peter could not believe it when she told him Willy and she are delinquents.
Character and courage are much more important than the social class you are belonging to.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi
Bei den folgenden Sätzen bin ich mir nicht so ganz sicher ob sie grammatikalisch und stilistisch richtig sind. Könnte mir bitte jemand helfen?
thx tullius


Especially cities showing considerable differences in their inhabitants' income - where people are quite rich or very poor - tend to have a high crime rate.OK, dieser Satz ist gar nicht mehr wieder zu erkennen, aber der ging vorher irgendwie nicht...
Some people are afraid to go out in broad daylight out of fear to get murdered.
This is the only kind of family they have got.
She seems to be a person needing somebody with enough influence on her to make her give up shoplifting.
Peter was frightened about what would happen next.
They seem to let them do whatever they want? Was willst Du hier sagen?
I cannot understand that his parents would be shocked if he was in contact with her, just because she belongs to another social class. On the other hand, they did not mind that Ellen - who had robbed many people - was with him.Hier bin ich nicht sicher, was Du sagen willst.
They ran away because they were sure that they would be blamed for the murder. indirekte Rede
This is the only fact that cheered me up.
I think he helped the old lady because he felt that he could do something what is right and so he lost all his whole fear.
Mandy noticed that Peter could not believe it when she told him Willy and she were delinquents.
Personality and courage are much more important than the social class you belong to. "belong" nicht in die Verlaufsform setzen.

So, das wär's. Manchmal sind Deine Sätze etwas kompliziert. Ich habe sie nicht alle umformuliert, weil es ja Dein Stil bleiben muss. Aber versuche z.B., nicht zu viele "that"s hintereinanderzusetzen.

Grüße
Duckduck

[tullius]

Danke für deine Antwort!:freu:

They seem to let them do whatever they want? Was willst Du hier sagen?
I cannot understand that his parents would be shocked if he was in contact with her, just because she belongs to another social class. On the other hand, they did not mind that Ellen - who had robbed many people - was with him.Hier bin ich nicht sicher, was Du sagen willst.

1. Satz: Sie (1. Gruppe von Leuten) lassen sie (2. Gruppe von Leuten) tun was auch immer sie (2. Gruppe von Leuten) tun wollen.
2. Satz: Ich kann nicht verstehen, dass seine Eltern schockiert wären, wenn er Kontakt zu ihr (nicht Ellen) hätte, weil sie einer anderen sozialen Schicht angehört.
3. Satz: Andererseits hatten sie nichts dagegen, dass Ellen, die viele Leute ausgeraubt hat, mit ihm zusammen war.

Ich habe die Sätze leicht umgeändert, indem ich die Namen und die Schauplätze etwas verändert habe, da unser Lehrer manchmal die Sätze googelt.
Deshalb sind sie hier etwas komplizierter als wie im Original

LG tullius