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[Michelle_29]

Hey.
ich muss am Donnerstag eine Buchvorstellung zu dem Buch "A Bend in the Road" halten und würde mich freuen wenn ihr meine ersten Ansätze schonnmal lesen könntet.
Danke.

Everybody knows this feeling – Love. You experience them every day by your family, your friends or by your boy- or girlfriend. You can find out the feeling of perfection by them. Anything you want is that this love never change, because you’re so happy as never befor. But love is different and can change.
However, unfortunately, this not always is in such a way. Pain, jealousy, desperation and say goodbye also belong to love.
It is exactly about these feelings in my book “A Bend in the Road” or in german “Weg der Träume”, which I want introduce you today.
At first I want to present you my structure. My talk is devided to 7 parts.
Firstly I will talk about bibliographical data and information on the author. Then I will look at characters and their constellation. The next point I want to mention is the content of the book. Next I talk about stylistic devices and switch over to the message of the book. Finally I speak about my personal evaluation.
I’ll start with my first point.
A Bend in the Road is the fifth novel by the American author Nicholas Sparks.
The dramatic fiction was published in 2001 by Warner Books in New York.
To the author. Nicholas Charles Sparks was born in Omaha,(Nebraska) on December 31 in 1965 as the second son of Patrick Sparks and Jill Emma Sparks. His siblings are Michael Earl und Danielle. As a child, he lived in Minnesota, Los Angeles and Grand Island, finally settling in Fair Oaks at the age of eight. His father was a professor and his mother a homemaker. He lived in Fair Oaks through high school and received a scholarship to the University of Notre Dame. After the Notre Dame school he wrote his first novel, though it was never published.
He and his wife Catherine, who met on spring break in 1988, were married in July 1989. While living in Sacramento, he wrote his second novel that same year, though again, it wasn’t published. He worked a variety of jobs over the next three years : waiting tables, selling dental products by phone and started his own small manufacturing buisiness. He began selling pharmaceuticals and moved from Sacramento to North Carolina in 1992. Two years later, at the age of 28, he wrote “The Notebook” over a period of six months. He followed that with “Message of a Bottle”, “A Walk to Remember”, “True Believer” and many others. All were international bestsellers, with almost 80$ million in worldwide sales and were translated into more than 45 languages. His newest book “The best of me” released in October 2011.

Now I want to talk about the characters of the book and their constellation.
The main character of the book is Miles Ryan. He is the Deputy Sheriff of New Bern. His first love called Missy. Missy was both charming and kind and Miles had loved her for all of his adult life. She had dark brown hair, even darker eyes and she spoke with an accent that made men from other parts of the country go weak in the knees. She laughed easily and listened with interest.
There are those, I know, who scoff at the idea that real love can exist at such a young age. But the love between Miles and Missy was in some ways more powerful than love experienced by older people, since it wasn’t tempered by the realities if life. They married and becom an son called Jonah. The life of the little family was perfect, but five years later, Missy was killed at age of 29 in a hit-and-run accident. As
a sheriff Miles not only grieves for Missy, but also longs to bring the unknown driver to justice.
Then Jonah gets at school a new teacher. Sarah Andrews notices immediately that the boy has considerable problems at school and asks Miles to a conversation. He is shocked because he has got nothing of the problems Jonahs and agreed private lessons with Sarah.
Both are impressed by her meeting very much and afterwards search the nearness of the other. Also Jonah seems to like Sarah very much.
While Thanksgiving Miles meets Sarah’s family. Maureen, the mother from Sarah, finds Miles immediately likeable and is glad for her daughter. Maureen ist loving but worried about the situation from her daughter. Since not only Miles, also Sarah has a heavy past behind. All Sarah wanted from life was the same kind of love her parents have for one another and always showered on her. She thought Michael was her life mate, but when they learned Sarah was infertile, he divorced her. She left Baltimore to start a new life in New Bern.
Sarah has also a younger brother, called Brian. He is a nice young man, but shy and not good at meeting people.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi Michelle und willkommen im Forum!

Du liebe Güte, da bist Du aber wirklich fleißig gewesen. Aber ganz ehrlich, wenn dieser Text so ausführlich bleibt und noch 5 weitere Abschnitte folgen...dann schläft Dir Deine Zuhörerschaft nach 3 Minuten ein. Sorry, ich mein's nicht böse.

Natürlich weiß ich nicht, wofür und in welchem Zusammenhang Du das Buch besprechen/vorstellen sollst (Schule? Ausbildung?). Jedenfalls musst Du aber gewaltig kürzen.
Und - ohne das Buch zu kennen - Teile Deines Textes klingen ein wenig, als hättest Du da über mehrere Zeilen hinweg aus dem Buch zitiert. Sowas geht nur, wenn Du das Zitat kenntlich machst, also wenigstens Anführungsstriche und am besten auch Seitenangaben.

Ich würde aber längst nicht so ausführlich sein. Personenbeschreibungen sind nicht nötig, der Inhalt sollte nur in knappen aber dafür umso prägnanteren Umrissen geschildert werden.

Sprachlich schwankst Du zwischen ganz prima und brrrr , Du hast doch nicht teilweise ein Übersetzungsprogramm eingesetzt, oder? Teufelszeug! Lass das bloß, da kommt nichts bei raus.

Ich will gerne korrigieren, aber meine, Du musst erheblich kürzen. Und das sollte natürlich vor der Korrektur stattfinden, denn, vertue Dich nicht: das ist eine ganze Menge Arbeit bei solchen langen Texten.

Viele Grüße und viel Glück

Duckduck

[Michelle_29]

Die Buchvorstellung ist für die Schule und soll eine halbe Stunde lang gehen. Deswegen musste es etwas ausführlicher sein.
Ich bin nicht die beste in Englisch, deswegen habe ich auch teilweise die Hilfe von Promt in Anspruch genommen.


Ich werde mir alles noch einmal durchlesen und nur ausschnitte hier stellen.
trotzdem danke.