2 kleine Absätze bitte korrekturlesen

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Hallo leute

ich schreibe morgen eine schularbeit über mein Maturathema und wollte euch fragen ob ihr die 2 thesen und deren erleuterung kurz korrekturlesen könntet und schlechte redewendungen durch bessere ersetzen könntet. Der Lehrer mag mich sowieso nicht so wirklich und es wäre toll wenn ich morgen nicht ganz so unvorbereitet kommen würde.

Die erste These bezieht sich auf das überthema Europa und die zweite auf das thema Bologna Prozess.

Es wäre ganz toll wenn mir jemand diese zwei absätze verbessern könnte. ich bedanke mich jetzt schonmal herzlichst dafür!!!


Is the European Dream a night mare?
The European dream has its roots in the 1950ies with the emergence of the European Union. Back then everybody had high expectations in the EU being a conglomeration of all member states with a common social culture, economic and financial advantages and benefits for all the people within the European borders. Over the time this faith has been diminishing due to several problems which have occurred within the European Union. This is a fact which is proven by the Europe-wide rising power of right-wing parties, attracting their voters with slogans claiming the exit from the European Union. It seems like the European dream, picturing a union of which each individual person is supposed to take advantage of, has shown its dark side. Has the European dream become a night mare?




The Bologna-Process. A step forwards or backwards a competitive Europe?
With the emergence of European Union and the creation of a common internal market the free movement of goods, capital, services and the freedom of movement of people was granted. Therefore we had the possibility of collaborating with each other in terms of economic affairs, including trading without boundaries and foreign investments.
For a continent which plays an important role on the world market, not because of its low production costs, but due to its high progress in research and development, it was obvious that the four freedoms mentioned were not enough. That is how a fifth freedom was granted by introducing the Bologna Process, the free movement of knowledge. Due to a collaboration of the member states the competiveness of Europe on the world market should be increased. Instead many critics claim a loss of quality due to the standardization of studies and several other points of criticism show that the Bologna-Process is rather a step backwards than forwards a competitive Europe.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Du schreibst heute ein Schularbeit und stellst deinen Text gestern um 21.57 Uhr Abends ein? Tut mir leid, aber das ist leider viel zu kurzfristig.