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From: Ralf

To: Patrick

Subject: Summer camp
Hello Patrick,
I had a great summer. I was in a summer camp in Schwarzwald. I stayed there for two weeks. In these two weeks I learned a many important things. I learned, how I make fire with only wood, how to build bow and arrow, etc. In my next e-mail to you, I describe then more. The weather was always good. I feel every day the warm sunshine in me. In the night it was cold, but I had a warm ceiling. We played many games, football, handball, etc.. I swam in the lake. We sang songs at the campfire and many more great things. We make a special event.
We had to find a treasure and I was the first and win a pen and a massage. It feels great as I found the treasure. This was the best summer camp I ever had, but the next summer camp is get better.

Bye Patrick.

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From: Ralf

To: Patrick

Subject: Summer camp

Hello Patrick,

I had a great summer. I was in a summer camp in the German Schwarzwald. I stayed there for two weeks.
In these two weeks I learned many important things. For instance, how to make fire using only wood,
how to build a bow and make arrows, etc. In my next e-mail to you, I'll describe that more.

The weather was always good. Every day I could feel the warm sunshine on my skin. During the night it was cold,
but we had a warm ceiling. We also played many games, football, handball, etc. I swam in the lake. We sang songs
at the campfire and many more great things.

The tresure hunt was a special event. I was the first to find it and won a pen and a relaxing massage.
It felt great when I found the treasure. This was the best summer camp I ever had, but I am already
looking forward to the next summer camp which might be even better.

Bye,
Ralf

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Danke,
Thanks