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[Michi_93]

Ich bitte um Korrektur von meinem Text:

My internship in the international hotel group
Have you ever done an internship for 3 months in the biggest hotel in Vienna?
I have done. In June, July and August I worked in the Hilton Vienna in the 3[sup]rd[/sup] district. This five-star hotel has 18 floors with 579 rooms and is located in the heart of Vienna, only 3 minutes to the next underground station.
As I said before I worked there 3 months and I liked it. My colleagues were very nice and friendly. My boss was a very young man and always in a good mood. In the sector I worked, I had mainly female colleagues. We did the washing and the house-keeping in the very modern rooms. But I don’t clean the whole day.
In the afternoons I worked in the service area. I served guests their meals and drinks and I also was allowed to serve the top-quality wine. You may be wondering why I accentuate this but it was an honour for me because one bottle of these wine costs over 400 Euros. One time an elder couple ordered a bottle of the best champagne the hotel has. I went into the bar and took the exquisite alcohol. I returned to the guests and filled the glasses with the champagne. The couple had a nip and suddenly the woman looked angry. She said with a nauseated voice: “What’s that? We ordered the best champagne you had and not these one for poor people!” I apologized for my mistake and brought them the right one. This is what happened when you aren’t so familiar with rich people and their standards.
When I told this story to my boss he was very amused about it and laughed. My mishap doesn’t disturb my anymore and so I also make fun about it.
If you ask me I only can recommend an internship in such a big hotel because I have collected many experiences. As you go in a tourism school like I do, you can use these experiences later in school at the exam you have in cooking and servicing.
On the one hand the work was very hard but on the other had it was also very funny. And beside you earn a lot of money.

Vielen Dank schon im Voraus!!!

Das habe ich nicht wirklich erlebt, soll nur eine Übung sein

[calcard]

Ich mag diesen Text, deswegen korrigiere ich ihn auch gerne:

My internship in the international hotel group
Have you ever done an internship for 3 months in the biggest hotel in Vienna? I have done. In June, July and August I worked in the Hilton Vienna in the 3[sup]rd[/sup] district. This five-star hotel has 18 floors with 579 rooms and is located in the heart of Vienna, only 3 minutes toaway from the next underground station.
As I said before, I worked there 3formonths and I liked it. My colleagues were very nice and friendly. My boss was a very young man and always in a good mood. In the sectorin whichI worked I had mainly female colleagues. We did the washing and the house-keeping in the very modern rooms. But Ididn't clean the whole day. In the afternoons I worked in the service area. I served guests their meals and drinks and Ialsowasalso(even) allowed to serve the top-quality wine. You may be wondering why I accentuate this,but it was an honour for me because one bottle of these wine costs over 400 Euros. One time an elder couple ordered a bottle of the best champagne the hotel has. I went into the bar and took the exquisite alcohol. I returned to the guests and filled the glasses with the champagne. The couple had a nip and suddenly the woman looked angry. She said with a nauseated voice: “What’sthatthis*? We ordered the best champagne you had and notthesethis**one for poor people!” I apologized for my mistake and brought them the right one. This is what happened when you aren’t so familiar with rich people and their standards.
When I told this story to my boss he was very amused about it and laughed. My mishap doesn’t disturb bother me anymore and so I also make fun about of it.
If you asked me, I only would really recommend an internship in such a big hotel, because I have collected many experiences. When you go to a tourism school like I do, you can use these experiences later in school at in the exam you have to take in cooking and servicing. On the one hand, the work was very hard, but on the other hand it was also very funny. And besides, you earn a lot of money.


Grün: Alternativorschlag
Blau: Korrektur Ausdruck
Rot: Fehlerkorrektur


*, ** Wenn man davon ausgeht, dass der Wohlstand dieser Leute mit einer korrekten Grammatik auch im gesprochenen Wort einhergeht, dann hätte sie „this“ (=„das hier“), im Gegensatz zu „that“ (=„jenes dort“) gesagt. Aber das ist nicht so wichtig, weil es die direkte Rede ist: wenn man in dieser kurzen Geschichte die „anspruchsvollen“ Gäste etwas auf die Schippe nehme möchte, so kann sie gerne grammatikalisch inkorrekte Sätze sagen lassen.

[calcard]

P.S. Eine Korrektur habe ich noch übersehen, aber eine auf Deutsch. Es heisst ja oft, der Dativ sei dem Genetiv sein Tod. Da ich ein Beschützer von aussterbenden Arten bin, möchte ich auch in diesem Fall verhindern, dass der Genetiv eines ungerechten Todes stirbt. Es müsste daher lauten "Ich bitte um Korrektur MEINES TextES".

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Ich mag diesen Text, deswegen korrigiere ich ihn auch gerne:
Ich mag den Text und die Korrektur, habe aber noch einige wenige Ooopserchen gesehen...
My internship in the international hotel group
Have you ever done an internship for 3 months in the biggest hotel in Vienna? I have done. In June, July and August I worked in the Hilton Vienna in the 3[sup]rd[/sup] district. This five-star hotel has 18 floors with 579 rooms and is located in the heart of Vienna, only 3 minutes (toaway - eigentlich könnte man die Präposition hier ganz weglassen) from the next underground station.
As I said before, I worked therefor3months and I liked it. My colleagues were very nice and friendly. My boss was a very young man and always in a good mood. In the sectorin whichI worked I had mainly female colleagues. We did the washing (laundry??) and the house-keeping in the very modern rooms. But Ididn't clean the whole day. In the afternoons I worked in the service area. I served guests their meals and drinks and Ialsowasalso(even) allowed to serve the top-quality wine. You may be wondering why I accentuate this,but it was an honour for me because one bottle of this wine/these wines costs over/more than 400 Euros. One time, an elderly couple ordered a bottle of the best champagne the hotel has. I went into the bar and took the exquisite alcohol. I returned to the guests and filled the glasses with the champagne. The couple had a nip and suddenly the woman looked angry. She said with a nauseated voice: “What’sthatthis*? We ordered the best champagne you have and notthesethis**one/stuff for poor people!” I apologized for my mistake and brought them the right one. This is what happens when you aren’t (so) familiar with rich people and their standards -> allgemeine Wahrheit, deshalb Präsens.
When I told this story to my boss he was very amused about it and laughed. My mishap doesn’t disturb bother me anymore and so I also make fun about of it.
If you asked me, I only would really (ich denke, hier geht auch gut der ursprünglich verwendete 1. Typ if-Satz: If you ask me, I can only recommend...) recommend an internship in such a big hotel, because I have collected a lot of experiences. When/Should you go to/attend a tourism school like I do, you can use these experiences later in school at in the exams you have to take in cooking and servicing. On the/hier geht auch "the one hand" one hand, the work was very hard, but on the other hand it was also very funny/machte viel Spaß-> was a lot of fun. And besides, you earn a lot of money.[/color]


Grün: Alternativorschlag
Blau: Korrektur Ausdruck
Rot: Fehlerkorrektur


*, ** Wenn man davon ausgeht, dass der Wohlstand dieser Leute mit einer korrekten Grammatik auch im gesprochenen Wort einhergeht, dann hätte sie „this“ (=„das hier“), im Gegensatz zu „that“ (=„jenes dort“) gesagt. Aber das ist nicht so wichtig, weil es die direkte Rede ist: wenn man in dieser kurzen Geschichte die „anspruchsvollen“ Gäste etwas auf die Schippe nehme möchte, so kann sie gerne grammatikalisch inkorrekte Sätze sagen lassen.

Grüße
Duckduck

[tiorthan]

Es heisst ja oft, der Dativ sei dem Genetiv sein Tod.

Who's responsible for that bullshit phrase anyway? Today, the genitive is used more often then it has been in centuries past, it's literally thriving.

This five-star hotel has 18 floors with 579 rooms and is located in the heart of Vienna, only 3 minutes (toaway - eigentlich könnte man die Präposition hier ganz weglassen) from the next underground station.

Ich würde es nicht nur "eigentlich" weglassen sondern generell. "From" hat bereits die Bedeutung "entfernt von".

One time, an elderly couple ordered a bottle of the best champagne the hotel had.

Es ist zwar so, dass das Hotel möglicherweise noch immer diesen Champagner hat, aber da es sich hier um eine Anekdote (und damit um eine Erzählform) handelt, sollte auch die Erzählzeit beibehalten werden.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Who's responsible for that bullshit phrase anyway?

Language Timothy!

[Michi_93]

Vielen Dank für die Korrektur!!!!

[tiorthan]

Who's responsible for that bullshit phrase anyway?

Language Timothy!

Uhm, I meant: Who did first publish this erroneous and untenable statement?

But Timothy?! Seriously, I don't even wear glasses!

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Aaaw bless your soul, you made my day!