Mary wakes up...

[nessy-01]

Hi, könntet ihr mir evt. schnell über den Text schaun?
Danke:


Mary wakes up when her alarm-clock begin to ring.
She know it is seven o´clock and she must get up.
The sun shines and lights up the room.
Mary yawns, stretches, and rise from her bed.
Then she goes to the room her son´s and wakes him up.
Her man is already in the office. He begins at six o´clock and he stands up at five o´clock.
She goes into the kitchen and makes coffe.
When she has drunk her coffe, she go into the bathroom to have a wash.
Then she goes to her wardrobe and begins to dress herself.
First she takes off her dressing-gown.
She put on her underwear and her stockings.
Then she takes her dress from the closet and put it on herself.
Finally she sees in the mirror on her cupboard and brush and comb her hair.
At the side of the closet depends Mary´s jacket.
She takes it and go over to the kitchen and wait of her son.
When he comes, she drives him to school and goes to her office.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi nessy,

bevor wir Deinen Text nun korrigieren, möchte ich Dich bitten, ihn nochmal selbst genau durchzulesen. Es ist recht seltsam, denn manchmal hast Du an das "s" bei der 3. Person Einzahl (he, she, it) gedacht und manchmal nicht. Besserst Du das bitte selbst aus?! Dann sehen wir weiter, ja?!

Grüße
Duckduck

[nessy-01]

Mary wakes up when her alarm-clock begin to ring.
She knows it is seven o´clock and she must get up.
The sun shines and lights up the room.
Mary yawns, stretches, and rises from her bed.
Then she goes to the room her son´s and wakes him up.
Her man is already in the office. He begins at six o´clock and he stands up at five o´clock.
She goes into the kitchen and makes coffe.
When she has drunk her coffe, she goes into the bathroom to have a wash.
Then she goes to her wardrobe and begins to dress herself.
First she takes off her dressing-gown.
She puts on her underwear and her stockings.
Then she takes her dress from the closet and puts it on herself.
Finally she sees in the mirror on her cupboard and brushes and combes her hair.
At the side of the closet depends Mary´s jacket.
She takes it on and goes over to the kitchen and waits of her son.
When he comes, she drives him to school and goes to her office.



richtig so?

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Schon viel besser, wenn auch noch nicht ganz fehlerfrei. Danke für's eigene Nachbessern!

Mary wakes up when her alarm-clock begins to ring.
She knows it is seven o´clock and she must get up.
The sun shines and lights up the room.
Mary yawns, stretches and rises from her bed.
Then she goes to the her son´s room and wakes him up.
Her husband is already in the office. He begins at six o´clock and he gets up at five o´clock.
She goes into the kitchen and makes coffee.
After drinking her coffee, she goes into the bathroom to have a wash.
Then she goes to her wardrobe and begins dressing herself.
First she takes off her dressing-gown. (Das ist ja fast wie ein Striptease andersrum...)
She puts on her underwear and her stockings.
Then she takes her dress from the closet and puts it on herself.
Finally, she looks at herself in the mirror and brushes her hair.
Then she puts on her jacket goes back to the kitchen and waits for her son.
When he comes (kriegt der arme Bengel kein Frühstück?) she drives him to school and goes to her office.


richtig so?

Grüße
Duckduck

[nessy-01]

Danke für das schnelle verbessern.
Ich habe kein Problem selbst nochmal dran zu gehen und bin für jeden Tipp dankbar.

Jaha gut das wir auf den Strip nicht näher eingegangen sind xD

Naja ich dachte, wenn sie um sieben aufsteht, ihn wecken, sich duschen, anziehen und ihren Kaffee trinken muss, dann geht sich das frühstück wahrscheinlich nicht mehr aus. ^^

[nessy-01]

So wollte es jetzt doch nochmal genauer schreiben und hab auch das Frühstück eingebaut
ist das so in Ordnung?

Mary wakes up when her alarm-clock begins to ring.
She knows it is seven o´clock and she must get up.
The sun shines and lights up the room.
Mary yawns, stretches and rises from her bed.
Then she goes to  her son´s room and wakes him up.
Her husband is already in the office. He begins at six o´clock and he gets up at five o´clock.
She goes to the kitchen and makes coffee.
After drinking her coffee, she goes to the bathroom to have a wash.
She cleans her teeth, takes a bath and blow-drys her hair.
Then she goes to her wardrobe and begins dressing herself.
First she takes off her dressing-gown.
She puts on her underwear and her stockings.
Then she takes her dress from the closet and puts it on.
Finally, she looks at herself in the mirror and brushes her hair.
Then she puts on her jacket goes back to the kitchen and layes the table.
On the place´s son, she put muesli and on her own places she put´s a roll and butter.
When he comes into the kitchen, they begin to eat and plan the day.
After eat she washes the dishes.
Then Mary goes to her car, drives her child to school ,and goes to her office.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

So wollte es jetzt doch nochmal genauer schreiben und hab auch das Frühstück eingebaut
ist das so in Ordnung?



Mary wakes up when her alarm-clock begins to ring.
She knows it is seven o´clock and she must get up.
The sun shines and lights up the room.
Mary yawns, stretches and rises from her bed.
Then she goes to her son´s room and wakes him up.
Her husband is already in the office. He begins at six o´clock and he gets up at five o´clock.
She goes to the kitchen and makes coffee.
After drinking her coffee, she goes to the bathroom to have a wash.
She cleans her teeth, takes a bath and blow-dries her hair.
Then she goes to her wardrobe and begins dressing herself.
First she takes off her dressing-gown.
She puts on her underwear and her stockings.
Then she takes her dress from the closet and puts it on.
Finally, she looks at herself in the mirror and brushes her hair.
Then she puts on her jacket, goes back to the kitchen and layes the table.
On the place´s son, she put muesli and on her own places she put´s a roll and butter. In diesem Satz ist einiges falsch, lass uns mal schauen: 1. Der Genitiv (wessen-Fall) wird bei Personen mit 's gebildet. So weit so gut! Aber Du bringst hier die Reihenfolge durcheinander. Die Frage ist: wessen Platz? Antwort: des Sohnes, also steht "Sohn" im Genitiv, bekommt das 's. Der Genitiv steht im Englischen immer vor dem Substantiv im Nominativ: also "the son's place". 2. Immer dran denken: he, she, it - das "s" muss mit! Hier steht allerdings nie ein ' vor dem "s". 3. Müsli isst man aus einer Schale, nicht von einem Teller. Der Rest ist eine Frage des Ausdrucks. Der Satz könnte demnach heißen:
She puts some muesli in her son's bowl and for herself she prepares a breadroll and butter.
When he comes into the kitchen, they begin to eat and plan the day.
After breakfast she washes the dishes.
Then Mary goes to her car, drives her child to school and goes to her office.

Alles gut, denke ich. Die arme Mary, sie ist ja bestimmt schon fix und fertig bevor sie bei der Arbeit ankommt...

Grüße
Duckduck