Motivationletter for medical school

[Einstein]

Hey,
I want to become a doctor, but first of all I have to get accepted by a university. I hope there is somebody, who can help me out. Iam sure, I made a lot of mistakes in my letter. Please help me ...

Dear Sir or Madam,

my name is XX, Iam XX years old and Iam living in xyz, Germany. Since my childhood, it is my big dream to study medicine. I was always interested in the human body. For me it is fun to explore how the anatomy is structured, how processes take place and what opportunities physicians have to cure diseases. To puzzle about something and to keep myself busy with difficult cases fascinates me. The connection between scientificaly work and being in contact with humans to treat them, is the perfect field of work for me.


I made my first practical experiences, when I did an intership at the 11[sup]th[/sup] grade in a hospital for two weeks, to see into the daily life and work of nurses and doctors. After finishing highschool, I did my second voluntary internship at the hospital. I accompanied a doctor at the intensive care unit and was able to see how physicians are working. It was so much fun for me and it just confirmed my wish to study medicine. After that, I had to form up my civilian service for the German government. Due to my wish to study medicine, I worked 9 months as a paramedic. During my training to become a paramedic, I did my third internship at the hospital. I was able to work with patients. It was allowed to me to perform a tracheal intubation and to respirate the patient and to do venous punctures etc.. But sometimes I was very disappointed, that we learned the most things too superficially, and I felt not being challenged sufficiently. When I asked the tutor questions, which went into the deep, he just advised me, that this is a training for becoming a paramedic and not a medical study. I felt disappointend, because I could not quench my thirst for knowledge. Thus, I have to study medicine!
Once even involved in a emergency at the hospital, I had to do a cardiopulmonary resuscitation and I even succeed and saved the patients life. That was a great example to see how much helpful medical knowledge can be. And it was also a great feeling and experience, to help a human and saving his life, which made me very happy. After the trainingship, I worked as a educated paramedic. To be responsibel for my patients, to treat and to take care of them has always shown me, that there is nothing else than my biggest wish to become a physician. All my experiences confirmed my decision to become a doctor and made my wish just stronger.
Now after I finished my 9 months as a paramedic, Iam going to do my fourth internship at the hospital for two months, during the application period of your university.


My teachers, my colleagues, my parents and my friends would describe me as very motivated, disciplined, activ and creativ. My hobbys are writing, playing piano, reading books and doing sports. I wrote sometimes for the local newspaper here, too. Besides 2010 , I won the „Literaturpreis xx“, a literary prize, for one of my short stories. Iam also very activ in politics, I even have a seat in the civic centre in xx, Germany and Iam a delegate for education. I worked together with politicians and tried to get aid to disadvantaged groups. Besides I helped children of immigrant families to improve their skills in german, mathematic etc. to get better in school.


I heared a lot of good experiences of your university and I really would like to become a student of yours. To learn a new culture, a new language and to study together with many international students is in my opinion very exciting and a unique chance and alternative, which Iam not able to experience in Germany, my home country.


Yours respectfully,
xx

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hey,
I want to become a doctor, but first of all I have to get accepted by a university. I hope there is somebody, who can help me out. I am sure, I made a lot of mistakes in my letter. Please help me ...

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is XX, I am XX years old and I am living in , Germany. Since my childhood, it has been my big dream to study medicine. I have always been interested in the human body. For me it is fun to explore how the anatomy is structured, how processes take place and what opportunities physicians have to cure diseases. To puzzle about something and to keep myself busy with difficult cases fascinates me. The connection between scientific work and being in contact with humans to treat them, is the perfect field of work for me.

I made my first practical experiences in grade 11, when I did an intership in a hospital for two weeks, to learn about daily life and work of nurses and doctors. After I finished highschool, I did my second voluntary internship at the hospital. I accompanied a doctor in the intensive care unit and was able to see how physicians are working. It was so much fun for me and it just confirmed my wish to study medicine. After that, I completed civil service for the German government. Due to my wish to study medicine, I worked 9 months as a paramedic. During my training to become a paramedic, I did my third internship at the hospital. I was able to work with patients. I was allowed to perform a tracheal intubation and to respirate the patient as well as carrying out venous punctures etc.. But sometimes I was very disappointed at the fact that we learned the most things too superficially, and I felt not being challenged sufficiently. When I asked the tutor more detailed questions, which went into the deep, he just advised me, that this is a training for becoming a paramedic and not a medical study. I was disappointed, because I could not quench my thirst for knowledge. Thus, I have to study medicine!

Once I even got involved in an emergency at the hospital. I had to do a cardiopulmonary resuscitation and I even succeed and saved the patient's life. That was a great example to see how much helpful medical knowledge can be. And it was also a great feeling and experience, to help a human and saving his life, which made me very happy. After the traineeship, I worked as an educated paramedic. To be responsible for my patients, to treat and to take care of them has always shown me, that I don't have a greater wish than becoming a physician. All my experiences confirmed my decision to become a doctor and made my wish even stronger.

Now after I finished my 9 months as a paramedic, I am going to do my fourth internship at the hospital for two months, during the application period of your university.

My teachers, my colleagues, my parents and my friends would describe me as very motivated, disciplined, active and creative. My hobbies are writing, playing the piano, reading books and doing sports. I wrote sometimes for the local newspaper here, too. In 2010 I won the „Literaturpreis xx“, a literary prize, for one of my short stories. I am also very active in politics, I even have a seat in the civic centre in xx, Germany and I am a delegate for education. I worked together with politicians and tried to get aid to disadvantaged groups. I also helped children of immigrant families to improve their skills in German, mathematic etc. to get better in school.


I heared lots of positive feedback about your university and I really would like to become a student of yours. To learn about a new culture, a new language and to study together with many international students is in my opinion very exciting and a unique chance and alternative, which I am not able to experience in Germany, my home country.


Yours respectfully,
xx

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hey,
I want to become a doctor, but first of all I have to get accepted by a university. I hope there is somebody, who can help me out. I am sure, I made a lot of mistakes in my letter. Please help me ...

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is XX, I am XX years old and I am living in , Germany. Since my childhood, it has been my big dream to study medicine. I have always been interested in the human body. For me it is fun to explore how the anatomy is structured, how processes take place and what opportunities physicians have to cure diseases. To puzzle about something and to keep myself busy with difficult cases fascinates me. The connection between scientific work and being in contact with humans to treat them, is the perfect field of work for me.

I made my first practical experiences in grade 11, when I did an internship in a hospital for two weeks, to learn about daily life and work of nurses and doctors. After I finished highschool, I did my second voluntary internship at the hospital. I accompanied a doctor in the intensive care unit and was able to see how physicians are working. It was so much fun for me and it just confirmed my wish to study medicine. After that, I completed civil service for the German government. Due to my wish to study medicine, I worked 9 months as a paramedic. During my training to become a paramedic, I did my third internship at the hospital. I was able to work with patients. I was allowed to perform a tracheal intubation and to respirate the patient as well as carrying out venous punctures etc. But sometimes I was very disappointed at the fact that we learned the most things too superficially, and I felt I was not being challenged sufficiently. When I asked the tutor more detailed questions, which went into the deep, he just advised me that this was a training for becoming a paramedic and not a medical study. I was disappointed, because I could not quench my thirst for knowledge. Thus, I have to study medicine!

Once I even got involved in an emergency at the hospital. I had to do a cardiopulmonary resuscitation and I even succeeded and saved the patient's life. That was a great example to see how much helpful medical knowledge can be. And it was also a great feeling and experience to help a human and save his life, which made me very happy. After the traineeship, I worked as an educated paramedic. To be responsible for my patients, to treat and to take care of them has always shown me, that I don't have a greater wish than becoming a physician. All my experiences confirmed my decision to become a doctor and made my wish even stronger.

Now after I finished my 9 months as a paramedic, I am going to do my fourth internship at the hospital for two months, during the application period of your university.

My teachers, my colleagues, my parents and my friends would describe me as very motivated, disciplined, active and creative. My hobbies are writing, playing the piano, reading books and doing sports. I sometimes wrote for the local newspaper here, too. In 2010 I won the "Literaturpreis xx“, a literary prize, for one of my short stories. I am also very active in politics, I even have a seat in the civic centre in xx, Germany and I am a delegate for education. I worked together with politicians and tried to get aid to disadvantaged groups. I also helped children of immigrant families to improve their skills in German, mathematics etc. to get better in school.


I heared lots of positive feedback about your university and I really would like to become a student there. To learn about a new culture, a new language and to study together with many international students is in my opinion very exciting and a unique chance and alternative, which I am not able to experience in Germany, my home country.


Yours respectfully,
xx

Den Stil und Ausdruck habe ich - weitgehend - unverändert gelassen, aber da waren noch so ein paar kleine Dinge...

Grüße an Beide
Duckduck

[Delfino]

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is XX, I am XX years old and I am living in XX, Germany. Since my childhood, it has been my big dream to study medicine. I have always been interested in the human anatomy. For me it is fun to explore how the body is structured, how processes take place and what opportunities physicians have to cure diseases. I enjoy thinking about difficult cases, it really fascinates me. The connection between scientific work and being in contact with humans to treat them, is the perfect field of work for me.

I made my first practical experiences in grade 11, when I did a two weeks internship at a local hospital, where I learned about the daily life and work of nurses and doctors. After I finished highschool, I did my second voluntary internship at the hospital. I accompanied a doctor in the Intensive Care Unit and was able to see how physicians are working. It was so much fun for me and it just confirmed my wish to study medicine. Afterwards I completed my 9 months civil service for the German government working as a paramedic. During my training to become a paramedic, I did my third internship at the hospital. I was able to work with patients. I was allowed to perform a tracheal intubation and to respirate the patient as well as carrying out venous punctures etc. Once I even got involved in an emergency at the hospital. I had to do a cardiopulmonary resuscitation and I succeeded and saved the patient's life. That was a great example to see how helpful medical knowledge can be. And it was also a great feeling and experience to help save a human's life, which made me very happy. After the traineeship, I worked as an educated paramedic. To be responsible for my patients, to treat and to take care of them has always shown me, that I don't have a greater wish than becoming a physician. All my experiences confirmed my decision to become a doctor and made my wish even stronger.

Sometimes during my training I was very disappointed at the fact that we learned most things too superficially, and I felt I was not being challenged sufficiently. When I asked the tutor more detailed questions, he just informed me that this was a training to become a paramedic and not medical study. I was disappointed, because I could not quench my thirst for knowledge. Thus, I have to study medicine!

Now after I finished my 9 months as a paramedic, I am going to do my fourth internship at the hospital for two months, during the application period of your university.

My teachers, my colleagues, my parents and my friends would describe me as very motivated, disciplined, active and creative. My hobbies are writing, playing the piano, reading books and doing sports. I sometimes wrote for the local newspaper, too. In 2010 I won the "Literaturpreis xx“, a literary prize, for one of my short stories. I am also very active in politics, I even have a seat in the Civic Centre in xx, Germany and I am a delegate for education. I worked together with politicians and tried to get aid to disadvantaged groups. I also helped children of immigrant families to improve their skills in German, mathematics etc. to get better in school.

I heard a lot of positive feedback about your university and I really would like to become a student there. To learn about a new culture, a new language and to study together with many international students is in my opinion very exciting and a unique chance. The alternative would be to study in Germany, my home country, without gaining as much further experience.


Yours respectfully,
xx