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Vulymuz

Commets

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Hallo,

ich hätte gern eine Korrektur bzgl. der Grammatik sowie Rechtschreibfehlern. Die einzelnen Zitate stellen die individuellen Aufgaben dar, die wir machen sollten ...
Pastor Donald wants to say that we should help everyone who need help because of their poverty for example.
Andy gets the mark "A" because of his kindness towards the bum. Andy donates him money in order to eat with him and Tommy in a restaurant.
Tommy gets the mark "B" because in principle he is a friendly and disciplined guy, who is pissed of with Andy, after he derides Pastor Donald.
Mrs. Skeffington gets the mark "C" because of her neutral part in the story. Of course, she informs Tommys and Andys parents because of their "transgression", but in my opinion such a behaviour by Tommy and Andy is more than unripe in a church.
Tommys partens get the marks "D" and "F", because I think they react false after they hear the story of the booting out from the church of their son, Tommy. They could talk with him friendly, but they exaggeraten and don't listen to him.
In my opinion Andy actuars in this situation very friendly and he is relaxed towards the bum. I think by deriding Tommy he loosens up the atmosphere and that's important in such a situation because Andy knows that's important in such a situation because Andy knows that the situation is very embarrassing for the bum.
The Bible tells us "if your enemy is hungry, feed him". But the reality shows that only a few people hold on to this wisdom. Why is it so difficult to put one's money where one's mouth is?

Andy and Tommy are two boys who have feed a hungry man in the short story "Bread on the Water" and therefore they follow one of the wisdoms of the Bible, which tells us: "If your enemy is hungry, feed him". But ironically they are checked out of a church because of Andys inappropriate behaviour towards Pastor Donald.
Maybe Andy mocks at Pastor Donald because he doubt the role of a church. Although a lot of people are religious, for example Christian, and visit churches, only a few people really help hungry people for example. At the end of the story Tommy and Andy get into frightful trouble from their parents because of their chucking out of the church, although they commit a more than Christian act by donating the bum a meal.

Summarized up it can be said that the proverb "Actions speak louder than words" apply to Andy and Tommy, but not to the other characters of the short story.
Vielen Dank!

Delfino

Re: Commets

Beitrag von Delfino »

Vulymuz hat geschrieben:Hallo,

ich hätte gern eine Korrektur bzgl. der Grammatik sowie Rechtschreibfehlern. Die einzelnen Zitate stellen die individuellen Aufgaben dar, die wir machen sollten ...
Pastor Donald wants to say that we should help everyone who needs our help, for example, because of their poverty.
Andy got the mark "A" because of his kindness towards the bum.
Andy donated money in order to eat with him and Tommy in a restaurant.
Tommy got the mark "B" because in principle he is a friendly and disciplined guy, who angered Andy when he derided Pastor Donald.
Mrs. Skeffington got the mark "C" because of her neutral part in the story.
Of course, she informed Tommy's and Andy's parents about their transgression, but in my opinion the behaviour of Tommy and Andy was more than inappropriate in a church.
...
TBC
Please inculde a German translation next time.
Otherwise it is very hard to check for mistakes.



After working to perfection in the vineyard, any unripe grapes have to be removed painstakingly by hand.

Delfino

Re: Commets

Beitrag von Delfino »

Tommy's parents got the marks "D" and "F", because I think, they react falsely after they heard the story about their son, Tommy, being thrown out of the church.
They could have talked with him more friendly, but they exaggerated and didn't listen to him.
In my opinion Andy acts very friendly in this situation and he is relaxed towards the bum.
I think, by deriding Tommy he tried to loosen up the atmosphere and that's important in such a situation.
Andy knows that it is important in such a situation which is very embarrassing for the bum.
The Bible tells us "if your enemy is hungry, feed him".
But the reality shows that only a few people hold on to this wisdom.
Why is it so difficult to put one's money where one's mouth is?
Andy and Tommy are two boys who have feed a hungry man in the short story "Bread on the Water".
So they followed one of the wisdoms of the Bible, which tells us: "If your enemy is hungry, feed him".
But ironically they are thrown out of a church after Andy's inappropriate behaviour towards Pastor Donald.
Maybe Andy mocked Pastor Donald because he doubt the sincerity of the church.
Although a lot of people claim to be religious and go to church, for example the Christians, only very few people are really willing to help hungry people.
And although they commited a more than Christian act by donating the bum a meal
at the end of the story Tommy and Andy got into a lot of trouble as their parents were informed about them being thrown out of the church.
Summarising it can be said that the proverb "Actions speak louder than words." applies to the behaviour of Andy and Tommy,
but not to the other characters of the short story.
Please use less slang for your English homework. Your teacher will appreciate it.

Vulymuz

Re: Commets

Beitrag von Vulymuz »

So wie ich das also verstanden habe, schreibt man in der Vergangenheitsform, wenn man einen Text in eigenen Formen widergeben möchte?

Delfino

Re: Commets

Beitrag von Delfino »

Da diese Sätze in einem gewissen Zusammenhang stehen und damit nicht als einzelne Aufgaben angesehen werden können ist es wichtig die Zeitform nicht zu oft zu wechseln.


Das diese Sätze den Inhalt eines Text in eigener Form wiedergeben hast du in deinem Originalbeteitrag nicht erwähnt.
Bei genauerem Lesen fällt auf, dass du gar nichts zu deiner Aufgabenstellung gesagt hast. :(

Welche Zeitform ihr verwenden sollt müßte dir aus dem Kontext deines Unterrichtes bekannt sein.

Die Anwendung des Simple Present ist wohl möglich
http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/grammar/sim_pres.htm

Aber wäre bei dem Inhalt nicht meine erste Wahl,
da Konsequenzen eigentlich nur eintreten nachdem vorangegangene Vorgänge passiert sind.