Business Cooresspondence Anschreiben

[anonym123]

Hey, ich habe eine Anfrage an ein Fantasieunternehmen gestellt.

Ich würde euch bitten, wenn ihr mal drüber schauen könntet, ob mein Text verständlich ist, etc.

Im Voraus schon mal vielen Dank.


Grüße

anonym123

Hier ist der Text:


Dear Sear or Madam,

your services have been recommended to us from our business partner “Carr & Sons Ltd”.

We, the Omnika Ltd. are well-established manufactures of the car industry. Because the recommendation of “Carr & Sons” we are very interested in your products.

Please enclose a catalogue of your latest products.

We are also interested in a long-term business apprenticeship with your company. We would appreciate it, if you could send some samples of the material. If the samples are okay, we would order in big quanity.

Please tell us your terms of quanity discounts and delivery.

We look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,


Anonymous

[SanDiego]

Hallo anonym123,

anbei dein Anschreiben. Ich habe ein paar Rechtschreibfehler und Satzstellungsfehler korrigiert. Ich finde das hört sich schon sehr gut an was du geschrieben hast.

Dear Sir / Madam,
your services have been recommended to us by our business partner “Carr & Sons Ltd”.
We, the Omnika Ltd., are a well-established manufacturer of the car industry. Due to the good the recommendation of “Carr & Sons” we are very interested in your products.
We are also interested in a long-term business apprenticeship with your company. It would be appreciated, if you could send some samples of the material you distribute. If the samples fulfill our conditions and are to our satisfaction, we would place bulk orders.
Please enclose a catalogue of your latest products and let us know if it is possible to obtain a quantity discount. Thank you in advance for enclosing your terms of delivery.

We look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,