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[JohannesK.]

Hallo Community,
ich bin gerade dabei mich für ein Praktikum in London zu bewerben. Da ich mich mit meinem English gerade ziemlich auf Schulniveau befinde würde ich euch bitten, vielleicht mal kurz drüber zu schauen.
Danke schonmal im Voraus

Freundliche Grüße
Johannes

Dear Sirs,
my name is xyz, I’m xx years old and I’m from xyz in South Tyrol-Italy.
In autumn of 2011 I will frequent the 4th class of hotelschool “Kaiserhof” at Merano, and for moving up to 5th class, I have to complete an internship at the reception in summer 2012.
Since I’m the winner oft the last provincial restaurant service-competition and therefore participant at the World-Skills competition in restaurant service in 2013, it would be helpful and great for me to absolve the internship at the “Hélène Darroze Restaurant” at The Connaught, before training for World-Skills starts. I’ve got a passion for wine and I’m currently absolving the 3.course to “AIS-Sommelier” in Italy. Next year in October I will start with the course to “Diploma in wine and spirits” (WSET). Since I want to become Sommelier, I would apply for an internship as Commis the Sommelier or Commis the rang, with special tasks regarding wine.
Obviously I know about the high requirements of “The Connaught” and I’m convinced to carry out them completely.
I`m very determined, able to work in a team and constantly searching for new challenges.
An excellent service according to the standards of the Hotel is just as natural for me as a friendly but even kind associate with the guest.

Looking forward to your kindly feedback and many greetings from the marvellous Dolomites.

Yours faithfully
Johannes Kohler

[Delfino]

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Xx Xx, I am xx years old and live in South Tyrol-Italy. In autumn
2011 I will attend the 4th level at the hotel school “Kaiserhof” in Merano.
As I want to become a sommelier I am hereby applying for an internship as
Commis de Sommelier or Commis de Rang with special tasks regarding wine.

I have a passion for wine and I am currently absolving the 3rd course towards
becoming an AIS Sommelier in Italy. In October next year I will start the course
to gain the Diploma in wine and spirits (WSET).

I am the winner oft the last regional restaurant service competition and therefore
qualified to participate in the World Skills competition in restaurant service in 2013.
I would really appreciate the opportunity to do an internship at the Hélène
Darroze Restaurant at The Connaught before my training for the World Skills starts.

An excellent service according to the standards of the hotel is natural for me.
I am very determined, able to work in a team and constantly searching for new challenges.
Therefore, I am convinced to meet the high requirements of The Connaught.

Looking forward to your kind feedback and
many greetings from the marvellous Dolomites.

Yours faithfully,
Johannes K...

To progress to the 5th level, I will have to complete an internship at the reception in summer 2012.
Möchtest du dafür deine Englischkenntnisse verbessern oder warum erwähnst du es?

a friendly but even kind association with the guest - you do not "hang out" with the guests


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