Business letter

[Chloe]

Hello all!

Could you correct my homework, please? I have to write a business letter. There is an advertising letter about English Christmas cakes and I have to write an enquiry. These points should be mentioned in my letter:

-Bezug auf Schreiben;
-etwas Britisches scheint interessant als Aufmerksamkeit zu Weihnachten für unsere wichtigsten Mandanten
-auch mittelgröße Kuchen mit einem Gewicht von 500-750 gr. erhältlich? Angebotene Größen für uns als Geschenk nicht so gut geeignet
-Kuchen auch ohne Nüsse erhältlich?
-wie lange haltbar?
-Bitte um Zusendung einer Geschmacksprobe
-Rabatt bei Abnahme von 50 bis 100 Stück?
-Zahlungsbedingungen für solche Mengen?



"Dear Ms White


Subject: Enquiry for English Christmas cakes

Thank you for your letter of 5 September 2010. On your website we found very interesting information about your products.

We are well-established chambers specialising in employment law. As a special Christmas gift we would like to give your cakes to our important clients.

Since your offered sizes do not suit for us, is it possible to deliver medium-sized cakes approximately 500-750g? Are cakes available without nuts? What is the use by date of this product?

We wonder if you could send us some sample for testing purposes.

Could you give us bulk discount for 50-100 cakes?

Please inform us about you term of payment for such amount of goods!

We look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely



Thomas Braun"





Thank you!



With best wishes,

Chloe

[Chloe]

Hello dear all!

Could you correct my enquiry, please? I have to show it to my teacher, but I am not sure about it.

Thank you very much!!!!!

With best wishes,
Chloe

[Delfino]

Hello everyone! / Dear all!

Could you correct my enquiry, please?
I have to show it to my teacher, but I am not sure about it.

Thank you very much!

With best wishes,
Chloe

Hello all!

Could you correct my homework, please?
I have to write a business letter.
There is an advertising letter about English Christmas cakes and I have to write an enquiry.
These points should be mentioned in my letter:

- Bezug auf Schreiben;
- etwas Britisches scheint interessant als Aufmerksamkeit zu Weihnachten für unsere wichtigsten Mandanten *
- auch mittelgröße Kuchen mit einem Gewicht von 500-750 gr. erhältlich? Angebotene Größen für uns als Geschenk nicht so gut geeignet
- Kuchen auch ohne Nüsse erhältlich?
- wie lange haltbar?
- Bitte um Zusendung einer Geschmacksprobe
- Rabatt bei Abnahme von 50 bis 100 Stück?
- Zahlungsbedingungen für solche Mengen?

_________________________________________________________________________

[addresses]

Subject: Enquiry for English Christmas cakes


Dear Ms White,

Thank you for your letter from 5th September 2010.
We found some very interesting products on your website.

X&Y is a well-established German chambers specialising in employment law.
We would like to give your cakes to our important clients as a special Christmas gift. /
* We think that something British would be an a really special Christmas for our important clients.

Unfortunately, the cake sizes you offered do not suit our needs.
May I ask you to supply us with medium-sized cakes of approximately 500g-750g?
Are cakes without nuts available too? What is the use-by date of this product?

Could you offer us a bulk discount for an order of 50-100 cakes?
Please inform us about your terms of payment for goods of this value.

We would appriciate it if you could send us some samples for testing purposes
and look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Thomas Braun



Thank you!

With best wishes,

Chloe

[joy]

Hello everyone! / Dear all!

Could you correct my enquiry, please?
I have to show it to my teacher, but I am not sure about it.

Thank you very much!

With best wishes,
Chloe

Hello all!

Could you correct my homework, please?
I have to write a business letter.
There is an advertising letter about English Christmas cakes and I have to write an enquiry.
These points should be mentioned in my letter:

- Bezug auf Schreiben;
- etwas Britisches scheint interessant als Aufmerksamkeit zu Weihnachten für unsere wichtigsten Mandanten *
- auch mittelgröße Kuchen mit einem Gewicht von 500-750 gr. erhältlich? Angebotene Größen für uns als Geschenk nicht so gut geeignet
- Kuchen auch ohne Nüsse erhältlich?
- wie lange haltbar?
- Bitte um Zusendung einer Geschmacksprobe
- Rabatt bei Abnahme von 50 bis 100 Stück?
- Zahlungsbedingungen für solche Mengen?

_________________________________________________________________________

[addresses]

Subject: Enquiry for English Christmas cakes


Dear Ms White,

Thank you for your letter of5 September 2010 about Christmas cakes. (Das Datum ist in Geschäftsbriefen so üblich)
We are interested in your advertised Christmas cakes, as we are looking for something typically British. A Christmas cake would be the ideal little present to express our thanks to our most important clients. X&Y is a well-established German chambers specialising in employment law. (Ich nehme an, dass „unsere“ Firma bekannt ist, da ja ein Brief an uns geschickt wurde, und erst noch namentlich.)
Unfortunately, the cake sizes you offered do not suit our needs.
May I ask you to supply us with medium-sized cakes of approximately 500g-750g?
Are cakes without nuts available too? What is the use-by date of this product?

Could you please offer us a bulk discount for an order of 50-100 cakes?
Please inform us about your terms of payment for goods of this value.
We would also appreciate it if you could send us some samples for testing purposes.
Thank you for your trouble, and we look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Thomas Braun




Thank you!

With best wishes,

Chloe

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