My diary Nachkontrolle

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My diary Nachkontrolle

Beitrag von amavisca »

Hallo Leute!
Ich heiße Max und bin neu hier. Ich muss bis nächste Woche einen Diary (Tagebucheintrag) bei meinem Lehrer abgeben und muss gestehen nicht ganz so kreativ im schreiben zu sein. Was mir derzeit aber größte Sorgen macht ist, ob ich die Grammatik und Satzstellung richtig gemacht habe.
Vielleicht kann mir ja jemand von euch einen Tipp geben, was ich noch verbessern könnte. Danke schonmal für jede Hilfestellung!!! :spin:


The last fishing session was the craziest session of my life. I was on my favorite lake to catch some beautiful carps. At first I built up my tent, than I thought about my taktic to catch some fish. I threw out my rods with the boat and feed the carps with some boilies (boilies=baits).
Back at the place I cooked a coffee and lay down to relax and enjoy the nature. At ten o´clock I had the first run on my left rod. Five minutes later I´d catched the first carp with 12 pounds. At two o´clock a friend came to me while I slept. He visited me, because he is a also a angler and we have got the same preferences. We love fishing, camping and of course carps. It was a clear night and fog was over the water. At seven o´clock I woke up, because my bitealarm was screaming. I sensed that is a big carp probably the biggest of my life. But seconds later he cutted the line and swam away. My fancy was very bad, I thought the carp was more powerful than me and I tryed it again. An hour later I could hold the next carp in my arms, exactly 26 pounds. After that I cooked a coffee and sit down on my chair. At nine o´clock I catched the third carp of that session with 20 pounds. At half past nine I catched an old friend named Joe. His weight was 18 pounds. I catched him the third time this year. Five minutes to twelve, the last carp bites. He weighted 22 pounds. At one o´clock my mother came to bring me home. It was the beautiful session of my live. I´m glad to go fishing the next week and hope it will be great. I know that fishing is not everbodys favourite sport but for me it is the greatest hobby. More than a hobby- a passion. In the last years I've got collected many experiences. You need these experiences to get better and better. So I will go on.



Yours,

joy

Re: My diary Nachkontrolle

Beitrag von joy »

amavisca hat geschrieben:Hallo Leute!
Ich heiße Max und bin neu hier. Ich muss bis nächste Woche einen Diary (Tagebucheintrag) bei meinem Lehrer abgeben und muss gestehen nicht ganz so kreativ im
Schreiben zu sein. Was mir derzeit aber größte Sorgen macht ist, ob ich die Grammatik und Satzstellung richtig gemacht habe.
Vielleicht kann mir ja jemand von euch einen Tipp geben, was ich noch verbessern könnte.
Danke schonmal für jede Hilfestellung!!!The last fishing session was the craziest session of my life. I was on my favorite(BrE = favourite)lake to catch some beautiful carps. At first I built up my tent, than I thought about my tactic to catch some fish. I threw out my rodsfromthe boat and feed the carps with some boilies (boilies=baits).
Back at the place
/ at my tentImadea coffee and lay down to relax and enjoy the nature. At ten o´clock I had the first run on my left rod. Five minutes later I´d caught the first carp weighing12 pounds. At two o´clock a friend came to me while Iwas asleep. He visited me, because he is a also anangler and we have got the same preferences. We love fishing, camping and of coursecatchingcarps. It was a clear night and foglayover the water. At seven o´clock Iwaswokenupby ascreaming sound of the bite alarm. I sensed that it was a big carp probably the biggest of my life. But seconds later he / it cut the line and swam away. My fancy was very bad, I thought it was a pity that the carp was more powerful than me and I tried it again. An hour later, however, I could hold a carp in my arms, exactly 26 pounds. After that I made some more coffee and sat down on my chair. At nine o´clock I caught the third carp in that session weighing 20 pounds. At half past nine I caught an old friend named Joe. His weight was 18 pounds. I caught him the third time this year. Five minutes to twelve, the last carp bites and was 22 pounds in weight. At one o´clock my mother came to take me home. It was the most beautiful session of my life. I´m looking forward to the fishing session next week and hope it will be great. I know that fishing is not everybodys favourite sport but for me it is the greatest hobby. More than a hobby – it is a passion. In the last years I have collected many experiences. You need these experiences to get better and better. So I will go on.



Yours,

amavisca

Re: My diary Nachkontrolle

Beitrag von amavisca »

Hallo Joy!!!

Vielen vielen Dank für deine Hilfe! Ich weiß gar nicht was ich sagen soll...außer dass ich blöde unnötige Fehler gemacht habe!

Danke nochmal...

SUPER FORUM!!!
Gruss!!!