Korrekturlesen - Summary "The Outsiders"

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Korrekturlesen - Summary "The Outsiders"

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Hey Leute.
Ich bin neu hier und brauche auch gleich eure Hilfe.
Und zwar muss ich eine Buchvorstellung machen. Ich habe jetzt auch schon alles fertig geschrieben und nun wollte ich euch bitten mein Summary des Buches "The Outsiders" korrektur zu lesen.
Ich denke schon dass da ne Menge Fehler drinn sind, aber das wird sich dann zeigen.
Schonmal Vielen lieben Dank! :) :D
Greetz!



Summary
The book is about two rivaling gangs with different socially backgrounds. Ponyboy Curtis is the narrator and lives in the Eastside of Tulsa, Oklahoma. Therefore he is a Greaser. Their enemies are the socs, the socials, who live in the Westside of Tulsa. Between this two gangs are many conflicts and fights in cause of their socially background.

One day there are a dead, because Ponyboy talks after a film with Marcia, a girl from the socs. Then Ponyboy and his friend Johnny walk through the park and then some socs arrived with a car. The want to drown Ponyboy in a fountain, but then Johnny takes a knife and kills Bob, the leader of the socs. The socs run away. With the help of Dallas the two can escape in an old church outside the city. After a week the church is burning and Ponyboy and Johnny noticed that kids are in the church. The two boys want to rescue them. In the last moment a wooden beam (Holzbalken) fall down on Johnny’s back. Dallas helped Johnny and takes him outside the church. The three must go into hospital. There they were celebrating as heroes. Ponyboy and Dallas can get out of hospital but Johnny has heavy burnings. In cause of the dead of Bob the hate between the two gangs is bigger as normal. It comes to a big fight. The Greasers win the fight but Johnny died by his injuries.

Dallas can’t absorb the dead of his friend. He attacks a little shop with an unloaded gun. In the pursuit with the police he takes his unloaded gun again and the police shoot Dallas in front of the eyes of the other greasers. After all this Ponyboy writes a essay about all this to assimilate this events.

joy

Re: Korrekturlesen - Summary "The Outsiders"

Beitrag von joy »

McFabren hat geschrieben:Hey Leute.
Ich bin neu hier und brauche auch gleich eure Hilfe.
Und zwar muss ich eine Buchvorstellung machen. Ich habe jetzt auch schon alles fertig geschrieben und nun wollte ich euch bitten mein Summary des Buches "The Outsiders" korrektur zu lesen.
Ich denke schon dass da ne Menge Fehler drinn sind, aber das wird sich dann zeigen.
Schonmal Vielen lieben Dank! :) :D
Greetz!




SummaryThe book is about two rivaling gangs with different socially backgrounds. Ponyboy Curtis is the narrator and lives in the east side of Tulsa, Oklahoma. Therefore he is a Greaser. Their enemies are the Socs, the socials, who live in the west side of Tulsa. Between this two gangs are many conflicts and fights because of their socially background.

One day (One day habe ich gestrichen, da du sonst alles in der Vergangenheit schreiben müsstest.) There has been a case of death, because Ponyboy talked after a film with Marcia after a film, a girl from the Socs. Then Ponyboy and his friend Johnny walk through the park and then some Socs arrived with a car. They want to drown Ponyboy in a fountain, but then Johnny takes a knife and kills Bob, the leader of the Socs. The Socs run away. With the help of Dallas the two can escape in an old church outside the city. After a week the church is burning and Ponyboy and Johnny noticed that kids are in the church. The two boys want to rescue them. At the last moment a wooden beam (Holzbalken ok) fall down on Johnny’s back. Dallas helps Johnny and takes him outside the church. The three must go into hospital. There they are celebrated as heroes. Ponyboy and Dallas can leavethe hospital but Johnny is suffering fromserious burns. Because of the death of Bob / Bob’s death the hatred between the two gangs has becomedeeper than usual. It comes to a big fight. The Greasers win the fight but Johnny has died from his injuries.

Dallas can’t
cope with the death of his friend and that is why he attacks a little shop with an unloaded gun. In the pursuit of Dallas, the police shoot Dallas dead before the faces of the other Greasers just when Dallas has taken his unloaded gun again. After all this, Ponyboy will write an essay about all this to assimilate this events.

McFabren

Re: Korrekturlesen - Summary "The Outsiders"

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Sehr cool. :)
Vielen lieben Danke. Hast mir echt n großen Gefallen getan. :) :freu:

joy

Re: Korrekturlesen - Summary "The Outsiders"

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Gerne geschehen.

Den folgenden Satz habe ich nochmals geändert:

In the pursuit of Dallas, the police shoot Dallas dead before the faces of the other Greasers just when Dallas has taken his unloaded gun again.
The police shoot Dallas dead before the faces of the other Greasers, just when Dallas has taken his unloaded gun again in pursuit of him.