Brauche dringend Hilfe bei meiner Bewebung

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Lisa1991

Brauche dringend Hilfe bei meiner Bewebung

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Hallo alle zusammen :wink:

Ich muss im Rahmen meiner Ausbildung eine Bewerbung an eine Praktikumsstelle auf Englisch schreiben. Allerdings bin ich nicht gerade gut im Texte schreiben hoffe allerdings, dass ich es ganz gut gemeistert habe.
Es wäre super Lieb wenn ihr / du meinen Text einmal durch schauen könntet, damit ich weiß, was ich noch verbessern muss bzw was ich besser machen kann.

Ganz Liebe Grüße
Lisa




Ladies and Gentlemen,
with this I would like an internship, from 24.Oktober.2011 to 16.Dezember.2011, with a focus on care at your institution "Stift Tilbeck" in Havixbeck apply-.
Currently I am visiting the "Liebfrauenschule" in at Coesfeld and make an education to health education nurse. I visiting at this stage at the lower grades.

The Dealing with people who how has a physical and / or mental deficit, prepares me a lot of fun and no problems because I am a very open and friendly person. In working with people how has an disabled I can feed my creative skills well. I also am a person who is very reliable and a team player, which I think this were important qualities at this area. Because I have made a voluntary social year at a special school, with a focus on a mental development, and training as a social worker, I could already collect a lot of experience in working with people, who had a deficit. Furthermore, I worked at the family support service (FUD) at the Lebenshilfe Borken and currently I works at a FuD from Haus Hall in Gescher. There I participated in the day care and individual support.

I hope that I applied at my practical experience above over the focus more on the maintenance of working with people who how has a deficit can learn.
For a reply from you I would be very happy.

joy

Re: Brauche dringend Hilfe bei meiner Bewebung

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Lisa1991 hat geschrieben:Hallo alle zusammen :wink:

Ich muss im Rahmen meiner Ausbildung eine Bewerbung an eine Praktikumsstelle auf Englisch schreiben. Allerdings bin ich nicht gerade gut im Texte schreiben hoffe allerdings, dass ich es ganz gut gemeistert habe.
Es wäre super Lieb wenn ihr / du meinen Text einmal durch schauen könntet, damit ich weiß, was ich noch verbessern muss bzw was ich besser machen kann.

Ganz Liebe Grüße
Lisa



Dear Sir or Madam
I would like to apply for an internship, from 24.October.2011 to 16.December.2011, with a focus on care at your institution "Stift Tilbeck" in Havixbeck apply-.
Currently I am attending the "Liebfrauenschule" in at Coesfeld and doing an education to health education nurse.Was heisst das genau? I visiting at this stage at the lower grades. Was heisst das?
The I have no problems in dealing with people who how has a physical and / or mental disability. On the contrary, it gives me great pleasure because I am a very open and friendly person. In working with people who have an disability I can use my creative skills well. I also am a person who is very reliable and a team player, which I think this were are important qualities in this area. Because I have made did a voluntary social year at a special school, with a focused on a mental development, and training as a social worker, I could already collect a lot of experience in working with people, who had a disability. Furthermore, I worked in the family support service (FUD) at the Lebenshilfe Borken and currently I am currently working in the FuD for Haus Hall in Gescher. There I have participated in the day care and individual support. (Ich nehme an, dass du hier immer noch arbeitest - wegen "currently")

I hope that I applied at my practical experience above over the focus more on the maintenance of working with people who how has a deficit can learn. Ich habe den Satz nicht verstanden und versuche es mit dem nachfolgenden Satz: I would like to continue working with disabled people and gather practical experience in this field. That is why I ask you to consider my application for an internship in your institution.

I would be pleased to be able to work in Havixbeck and look forward to your reply.
Yours faithfully.