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[Catman]

Hallo,

Hab einen kurzen Text (Songtext) geschrieben, aber bin nicht sicher ob das alles so verständliche ist.

just one last time
just one last kiss
Just one last look into your eyes..and i feel fine

i miss the way you laugh and smile
and how you roled her preatty eyes..
we passed away just like the time...
we had...now nothing seems alright..

you made my world a better place...
and how you looked behind my face...
it made me feel like so much more...
than i ever thought i was...
before...we met...i never thought, that it could be,
like what we had, like you and me,
and since you're gone, my only wish is to go back...
to make you mine
just one last time...


Vielen Dank schonmal,

Andy

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hallo,

Hab einen kurzen Text (Songtext) geschrieben, aber bin nicht sicher ob das alles so verständlich ist.

just one last time
just one last kiss
Just one last look into your eyes..and I feel fine

I miss the way you laugh and smile
and how you rolled your pretty eyes..
we passed away just like the time...
we had...now nothing seems alright..

you made my world a better place...
and how you looked behind my face...
it made me feel like so much more...
than I ever thought I was...
before...we met...I never thought, that it could be,
like what we had, like you and me,
and since you're gone, my only wish is to go back...
to make you mine
just one last time...


Vielen Dank schonmal,

Andy

*schnief* Das ist ein wirklich schoener Text!