motivationsschreiben

[serce]

Hallo Ihr Lieben!




Ich bewerbe mich für einen Masterplatz und muss ein Motivationsschreiben auf Englisch verfassen.

Ich hatte zwar Englisch-Leistungskurs in der Oberstufe, aber mir fiel es schwer diesen Text zu schreiben. Die Bewerbung muss ich spätestens bis morgen abschicken!

Könntet Ihr den Text lesen und korrigieren?




Vielen Dank im Voraus




Application for admission to the Master in Biology



Dear Selection Committee,

I hereby wish to apply for a place in the Master's program in Biology at the university x.
Currently I study biology at the University of x with the main area in genetics, cell biology and physiologist´s.

In a few days I begin my Bachelor Thesis in the workgroup of PD. Dr. X. PD. Dr. X is the head of the research group
"
X" in the department of x. Moreover he is the group leader of the “X”. My Bachelor Thesis deals with the human pathogen Corynebacterium X. My task will be to sequence specific promoter regions which are important for the X-Oxidation in Corynebacterium.



I consciously decided for Microbiology and Immunology because microorganisms and their impact to human beings awaked my interest. I chose my area of specialization adequate to my interests. In the course of my studies I had the chance to have insights to the current research. I worked with human pathogens like Corynebacterium X. Corynebacterium X possesses multiresistances and this why
immunosuppressed
patients die within a short time. This fact tempted me to work with such kind of microorganism.



With the studies in Biology at the University X I fondly hope to get more knowledge und to share it. I would like to descry my abilities. I realize that I will meet new challenges in the Master.

I wish to study at the University X because the field of study “Mikrobiology and Immunology“ connects two main areas. The University X fulfills every criteria which I expect from a university. It is eminently respectable and moreover close to the economy. You lead spin offs with biotechnological background which are very successful. Last year I flow to cuontry X to visit the University X. I had valuable insights into the laboratories of the university at the area x.

Moreover I wish to get to know new students from all over the world.



I will acquire my degree in the same area like the master at the university x. Therefore the Master represents a perfect connection to my bachelor.

After my Master I anticipate to do a PhD in the
Institute of “x” in the works of Mr.x. After my PhD I would like to work in the molecular biomedicine!

I would be glad to get a positive responsive.



With kind regards

[Delfino]

Hallo Ihr Lieben!
Ich bewerbe mich für einen Platz im Masterprogramm und muss dafür ein Motivationsschreiben auf Englisch verfassen.
Ich hatte zwar Englisch-Leistungskurs in der Oberstufe, aber mir fiel es trotzdem schwer diesen Text zu schreiben.
Die Bewerbung muss ich spätestens bis morgen abschicken!

Könntet Ihr bitte den Text lesen und korrigieren?

Vielen Dank im Voraus
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Application for admission to the master's program in Biology


Dear members of the selection committee,

I hereby apply for a place in the master's program in Biology at the University of x.

I am currently studying biology at the University of x with the main area in genetics, cell biology and physiology.
In a few days I am going to begin the work on my bachelor thesis in the workgroup of PD. Dr. X.
He is the Head of the X research group in the Department/Faculty of x.
Moreover he is the group leader of the “X”. You mentioned that already - otherwise it wouldn't be his workgroup.
My bachelor thesis focuses on the human pathogen Corynebacterium X.
To be more precise I will be sequencing specific promoter regions which are important for the X-Oxidation in Corynebacterium.

I consciously decided to work on microbiology and immunology because microorganisms and their impact on human beings are of special interest to me.
In the course of my studies I had the chance to gain insight into current research.
I chose my area of specialization adequate to my interests.
I have already been working with human pathogens such as the Corynebacterium X.
The Corynebacterium X possesses multiresistances and this why immunosuppressed patients die within a short time.
This fact tempted me to work with such kind of microorganism.

With the end of my studies at the University X in sight I am looking forward to gain more knowledge und to share it. (Share it with whom?)
Now I would like to describe my abilities. (this reminds me of superman...)
I have realized that postgraduate studies will be a new challenge which I am going to master. (e.g. good time mangement and fluent in English, right?)

I wish to study at the University X because the field of study “Mikrobiology and Immunology“ connects two main areas.
The University X fulfills every criteria which I expect from a university.
It is eminently respectable and moreover close to the economy.
You lead spin offs with biotechnological background which are very successful.
Last year I flow to cuontry X to visit the University X.
I had valuable insights into the laboratories of the university at the area x.
Moreover I wish to get to know new students from all over the world.
I will acquire my degree in the same area like the master at the university x.
Therefore the Master represents a perfect connection to my bachelor.
After my Master I anticipate to do a PhD in the Institute of “x” in the works of Mr.x.
After my PhD I would like to work in the molecular biomedicine!

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

With kind regards

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Die deutsche Übersetzung fehlt auch und dass deine Anfrage hier viel zu spät kommt weißt du hoffentlich selbst...

Den kursiven Teil habe ich nicht mehr korrigiert. Es ist schon spät ...

[Keswick (Contributor)]

[...] und dass deine Anfrage hier viel zu spät kommt weißt du hoffentlich selbst...

Dass du es dennoch ueberhaupt korrigiert hast ehrt dich, lieber Delfino!

[serce]

Ich bedanke mich herzlich bei Euch!