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[dzana]

ich muss einen referat von Bruno Mars auf englisch halten.
ich hab schon meine texte geschrieben aber natürlich wär es besser wenn es kontrolliert wäre.
mein text:

Peter Gene Hernandez was on 8 October 1985 in Waikiki, a suburb of Honolulu in Hawaii and grew up there.
He is an American make U.S. R & B musician, songwritter and music producer.
With the song "Nothin 'on You, "which he sang with BoB, he became famous.
Bruno Mars in August 2010 published his first solo debut single "Just the Way You Are "

His mother comes from the Philippines and his father from Puerto Rico.
He comes from a musical family and has 5 siblings

In 2003, after school at age 17 he moved to Los Angeles to begin his musical career there.
He is a real multi-talent. In Los Angeles, he founded "Philip Lawrence 'and"Ari Levine "the songwriting and production team The Smeezingtons

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Ich muss einen Referat von Bruno Mars auf Englisch halten.
Ich habe schon meine Texte geschrieben aber natürlich wäre es besser wenn sie noch einmal kontrolliert werden wuerden.
Mein Text:

Peter Gene Hernandez was born in Waikiki, a suburb of Honolulu in Hawaii, on 8 October 1985 and he also grew up there.
He is an American-born U.S. R & B musician, songwritter and music producer.
He became famous with the song "Nothin 'on You, "which he sang with BoB.
Bruno Mars published his first solo debut single "Just the Way You Are " in August 2010.

His mother comes from the Philippines and his father from Puerto Rico.
He comes from a musical family and has 5 siblings.

In 2003 at age 17, and after graduating from school, he moved to Los Angeles to begin his musical career there.
He is a real multi-talent. In Los Angeles, he founded "Philip Lawrence and"Ari Levine" the songwriting and production team The Smeezingtons

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