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Hallo! Bitte checkt das mal für mich, ich habs leider nicht so mit Grammatik :) Danke!

May I introduce myself? My name is..... I’m 29 years old. I was born in Lower Austria, but I grew up in Burgenland. I live since 2006 in the 10th district in Vienna, in a small flat on my own, together with 2 cats. I prematurely broke off my education at a Gymnasium, to work at an animal shelter as a zookeeper. Later I also worked as a veterinary assistant in a veterinary practice. I really loved this jobs, because I love animals from the button of my heart, but for financial reasons I searched for a securer job. I work now for 5 years as a secretary in a printing company, also in the tenth district, just a 10 minutes walk away from my home. I am responsible for the bookkeeping, preparing delivery notes, telephone services and direct mailings. Since I could not show appropriate qualifications for my new job, I attend to the commercial school in 2007, which I had passed in March 2009 with good results. Originally I wanted to study literature or business informatics after the Matura, but meanwhile I lost my motivation to study onwards. Probably I will search for a better paid and more interesting job and in a few years I will care for family planning.

Thanks!!!

Delfino

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Salka hat geschrieben:Hallo! Bitte checkt das mal für mich, ich habe es leider nicht so mit Grammatik :) Danke!

May I introduce myself?
My name is...
I’m 29 years old.
I was born in Lower Austria, but I grew up in Burgenland, the easternmost state of Austria.
S
ince 2006 I live in the 10th district in Vienna.
I riside
in a small flat together with my two cats.
I prematurely broke off my education at a high school to work as a zookeeper at an animal shelter.
Later I also worked as a veterinary assistant in a veterinary practice.
I really enjoyed working in this sector (these jobs), because I love animals from the button of my heart.
But for private reasons I had to search for a more financially rewarding job.
I've now been working for 5 years as a secretary in a printing company.
The company is also located in the tenth district, just a 10 minutes walk away from my home.
I am responsible for the bookkeeping, preparing delivery notes, telephone services and direct mailings.
To gain an appropriate qualification for my new job I started to attend a commercial school in 2007.
In March 2009 I finished my education with good results in all subjects.
My original plan was to study literature or business informatics after gaining the Matura (A-levels), but meanwhile I lost my motivation to study onwards.
I will probably continue searching for a better paid and more interesting job.
In a few years I will think about family planning.

Thanks!
Berufsbezeichnungen schreibt man klein.
Aber wenn du die offizielle Bezeichnung deiner Position/Rolle in der Firma ausdrückst wird sie groß geschriben.

A zookeeper helps animals.
She is the Zookeeper of our animal shelter.