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[banditler]

Hallo, ich sollte eine Charakterisierung schreiben. Wärt ihr so nett und würdet mal auf Grammatik und Rechtschreibumng schauen?


Danke und viele Grüße



A young man under compression!


The main charakter is Gordon Hayes a swimmer.
He is tall and he has long legs and strong muscles. Gordon has a friendly face and dark brown hair.
He has a swimming competition against a boy from Durham.
Gordon shows an afraid and a nervous behaviour because he"....is shaking like a leaf....",he is very hopless (F.21) since he must win the competition otherwise his cruel selfish father will hit him with a belt.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hallo, ich sollte eine Charakterisierung schreiben. Wärt ihr so nett und würdet mal auf Grammatik und Rechtschreibumng schauen?


Danke und viele Grüße

Huhu, auch wenn's ein Schwimmer ist, ich glaube, Du meinst eher "under pressure" !

A young man under pressure!

The main character is Gordon Hayes, a swimmer.
He is tall and he has long legs and strong muscles. Gordon has a friendly face and dark brown hair.
He has to compete against a boy from Durham in a swimming contest.
Gordon is nervous, because he"....is shaking like a leaf....". It is also obvious that he is frightened (F???. 21), since if he does not win the competition, his cruel, selfish father will hit him with a belt.

Grüße
Duckduck

[banditler]

Vielen Dank für die Korrektur. Hat mir sehr geholfen.

Lg.