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Hallo liebe Community,

ich habe eine Hausaufgabe bekommen, die ich bis Mittwoch erledigen soll.

My task is to summarize an excerpt from a novel, and i need your opinion.

The excerpt from the novel " Lush Life" written by Richard Price is about two boys who are planning on to deal with drugs in order to earn money.

Tristan who is a Puerto Rican student meets a boy named Little Dap who is a drug dealer like is big famous brother Big Dap.
Little Dap wants to earn his money as fast as he can and that´s why he needs the help of Tristan. As a Puerto Rican he looks
like Dominicans who are able to buy cheaper drugs as other nationalities. Hence, they want to buy cheap drugs to sell
them at a high price in order to make as much profit as they can.

So how is my text? Did you understand my summary?


Yours Faithfully Ates

[choccy_hobnob]

The excerpt from the novel "Lush Life", written by Richard Price, is about two boys who are planning on dealing drugs in order to earn money.

Tristan, who is a Puerto Rican student (oder einfach: "Tristan, a Puerto Rican student..."), meets a boy named Little Dap, who is a drug dealer like his famous big brother, Big Dap. Little Dap wants to earn his money as fast as he can (umgangssprachlicher: "wants to make a quick buck"), and that's why he needs Tristan's help. As a Puerto Rican, Tristan looks like a Dominicans, and Dominicans are able to buy cheaper drugs than other nationalities. In this way, they (oder: "the two") want to buy cheap drugs which they can then sell at a high price in order to make as much profit as they can.

So how is my text? Did you understand my summary?

I understood it very well! Ich mache mal ein paar stilistische Anmerkungen, aber die Zusammenfassung ist dir alles in allem prima gelungen!

Yours Faithfully Ates

Ach, so förmlich sind wir hier nicht In einem Internetforum wirkt "Yours faithfully" schon ein bisschen übertrieben. "Thanks in advance" wäre ausreichend gewesen.